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Mon, 2016-10-17 04:51
jacqui-pup
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UP: Love it. Also kind of a weird Inflame which makes the R fitting. I think the forecast is too oppressive though.

Nyxswarm Harpies 4 mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Enchantment Creature - Harpy Rare
Flying
Whenever another nontoken creature you control dies, if Nyx Harpy Queen is in your graveyard, you may pay 1 mana symbolBlack mana symbol. If you do, create a 1/1 black Harpy creature token with flying.
4/4

Cheating? Yes.

OLD: Bird.
NEW: Construct.

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Mon, 2016-10-17 14:27
Mocandragon5
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Up: Nice and simple. My only question is if the ability is supposed to refer to another card? Also, due to harpies only being half bird, doesn't that only half fit the challenge?

Steelwing Scout 4 mana symbol
Artifact Creature - Bird Construct Uncommon
Flying
When ~ enters the battlefield, you may discard a land card. If you do, search your library for a land card, reveal it, put it into your hand and shuffle your library.
2/2

Old: Construct
New: 2 or more colours

Fri, 2016-10-21 19:33
Celebi
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Up: Fine land tutor... Not sure if I'd run this over other land tutors tho.

Inkblood Strix Blue mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Artifact Creature - Bird Construct Uncommon
Flying, deathtouch
When Inkblood Strix dies, choose a color. For the rest of the game, permanents onto the battlefield are that color in addition to their other colors.
1/1

Old: Two or more colors
New: Likes [other] planeswalkers

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Sat, 2016-10-22 00:53
Flo00
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Up: That's a quite big effect for an uncommon. I think it should be rare. Also, it should either give you an emblem or just last while it's in the graveyard. Because effects like that are easily forgotten and if there is something specific that does the effect, it's way easier to remember.
Also it's "permanents on the battlefield"

Scaro Allface 2 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Planeswalker - Scaro Mythic Rare
0 Loyalty Search target player’s library for a planeswalker card and exile it. Put loyalty counters on Scaro Allface equal to that planeswalker’s loyalty.
-1 Loyalty Scaro Allface becomes a copy of target planeswalker.
(2)

Old: Likes [other] planeswalkers
New: Instat or sorcery

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Sat, 2016-10-22 01:04
Xenagos
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Gideon's Familiar 1 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol
Creature - Bird Rare
Flying
When ~ enters the battlefield, put a loyalty counter on target planeswalker that entered the battlefield this turn.
1/1

Old: Likes (other) planeswalkers
New: From the plane of Tarkir

EDIT: oops, looks like I got ninja'd.

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Sat, 2016-10-22 01:38
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Sacro Allface: You do realize that the phrase "becomes a copy of" also replaces the it's abilities right? This is different from saying "becomes" without saying "copy".

Gideon's Familiar: The only real problem I have with this is the flavor: why would Gideon have a bird as a familiar. > Implying he would have a familiar at all.

Ojutai's Lessons White mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Instant Rare
Choose one --
::Target instant or sorcery spell gains rebound.
::The next instant or sorcery spell cast has rebound.
Rebound

Old: From Tarkir and/or and instant or sorcery
New: Uses Planar Choas's color-pie.

Sat, 2016-10-22 01:55
Vunik
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Up: Cool card...but how does it like planeswalkers?

Breath of Nature 1 mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Sorcery Rare
Target creature can't attack or block this turn, and gains "Tap symbol: Add 1 mana of any color to your mana pool" until end of turn.

Old: Uses Planar Chaos's color pie
New: Enables transhumanism (in other words, likes Equipments).

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Sat, 2016-10-22 02:37
Yoshi
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Up: Probably really weak, given say, Utopia Vow.

Reconnaisance Raidblade 1 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Human Soldier Uncommon
Whenever CARDNAME blocks or becomes blocked, draw a card.
Armed - CARDNAME has vigilance as long as it's equipped.
2/3

Old: Likes equipments
New: Legendary creature

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Mon, 2016-10-24 21:06
jacqui-pup
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UP: Vigilance in Blue mana symbol is a bit suspect. I like this otherwise

Tae Aquil, Viridian Weaponsmith Green mana symbolWhite mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Elf Artificer Rare
Tae Aquil gets +X/+X, where X is the greatest converted mana cost among Equipment you control.
2/2

OLD: Legendary creature
NEW: Colorless.

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Wed, 2016-10-26 16:50
Celebi
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Up: Unique, and probably really good in a equipment heavy deck. Don't know if it should be green though.

Colres, the Albescent 1 mana symbolColorless mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Wizard Rare
Whenever a noncreature colored source deals damage to you or to a permanent you control, you may pay 1 mana symbolColorless mana symbol. If you do, Colres, the Albescent deals that much damage to that source's controller.
2/1

Old: Colorless
New: Aura

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Wed, 2016-10-26 17:52
Reality Glitch
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A bit on the nose, but ultimately a clean design.

Dreamform 2 mana symbol
Tribal Enchantment -- Illusion Aura
Changeling, Enchant creature
Enchanted creature has all creature types and dreamwalk (Untapped creatures can't block this creature. Tapped creatures can block this creature.)

Old: Aura
New: Designed with a great artifact type update in mind. (Much like how creatures had species/profession, artifacts would have material(Metal, Wood, Stone, etc.)/Function (Weapon, Orb, Instrument, etc.)

Wed, 2016-10-26 17:57
digiman619
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Up: Mostly anti-red, regardless of what it says, but interesting.

Essence of Ghostflame 1 mana symbolColorless mana symbol
Enchantment- Aura Common
Enchant creature
Enchanted creature is colorless.
Enchanted creature has "Colorless mana symbol: This creature gets +1/+0 until end of turn."

Old: Aura
New: CMC 6 or greater.

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Thu, 2016-10-27 01:44
Yoshi
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Dreamform: Interesting. Would be cool.
Essence of Ghostflame: Simple design. Could probably be Colorless mana symbol.

This might not make sense.

Sagu Sprockets 3 mana symbolGreen mana symbolBlue mana symbolRed mana symbol
Artifact Enchantment - Aura Contraption Rare
Blueprint -- Sacrifice four artifacts (If a Rigger would tell you to assemble a contraption, you may instead reveal this card from your hand and pay it's Blueprint cost. If you do, assemble it onto the battlefield.)
Enchant creature
Enchanted creature gets +6/+6 and has hexproof and trample.
Many machines make one masterpiece.

How can something be an artifact and enchantment and a contraption at the same time? Ask a rigger.

Old: CMC 6 or greater/Designed with a great artifact type update in mind
New: Spider

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Sun, 2016-10-30 07:23
Flo00
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Up: That's quite a confusing way to refer to assemble. Powerful card.

Spider Nestler 4 mana symbolGreen mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Creature - Spider Uncommon
Spider Nestler gets +1/+1 for each other Spider on the batltefield.
2 mana symbol: Each player may sacrifice a Wood artifact. Each player who does, puts a 1/2 green Spider creature token onto the battlefield.
4/3

Old: Spider
New: Gun

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Mon, 2016-10-31 00:40
Wapulatus
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Up: Intresting design, however due to the lack of information given on what Wood artifacts are and how common they are (since they do not appear in normal MTG) I can't say how effective it would be gameplay wise. I'd say it's fairly costed for its effect in every other aspect, and would be brutal in a dedicated Spider tribal deck (please make that a thing). Without those little arachnids however, it's grossly overcosted. Also, lack of reach is a flavor fail for spiders.

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Arachnid Catapult - 2 mana symbol

Artifact - Common

When ~ enters the battlefield, create a 1/2 green Spider creature token with reach.
Tap symbol, Green mana symbol, Sacrifice a Spider: Destroy target creature with flying or artifact. That creature's controller creates a 1/2 green Spider creature token with reach.

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Old: Gun
New: Living Weapon

Mon, 2016-10-31 01:36
jacqui-pup
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UP: Way too complicated for common. Compare/contrast with Cogworker's Puzzleknot for this sort of thing at common. Even then it's kind of awkward.

Coconut Gun 2 mana symbol
Artifact - Equipment Common
Living weapon
Equipped creature gets +1/+1. It gets an additional +2/+2 if it's an Ape.
Equip 1 mana symbol

OLD: Living Weapon
NEW: Enchantment hate.

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Mon, 2016-10-31 02:31
Celebi
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Up: Simple and funny, I wish it was Ape and Monkeys though.

Tangle Walker 1 mana symbol
Artifact - Equipment Uncommon
Living weapon (When this Equipment enters the battlefield, put a 0/0 black Germ creature token onto the battlefield, then attach this to it.)
Equipped creature gets +1/+1.
2 mana symbolGreen mana symbol, Unattach from equipped creature: Destroy target enchantment.

Old: Enchantment Hate
New: Bear (2/2 for 2CMC)

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Mon, 2016-10-31 03:06
bioplay
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Tangle Walker: Interesting. I don't want to just assume that you forgot an Equip cost, but if that was intentional, why? Equipments without Equip cost should have some justification for needing outside help. Like, being really powerful for low CMC for example. If you just forgot though, then don't worry about. Nothing really wrong with this card except syntax: Ability should read: "2 mana symbolGreen mana symbol, Unattach CARDNAME:" a la Sunforger. Nice. 8.5/10

Cursehunter 1 mana symbolWhite mana symbol
Creature - Spirit Cleric Uncommon
Flying
CARDNAME gets +1/+1 for each enchantment your opponents control.
[2/2]

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Next: Bird

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Mon, 2016-10-31 04:29
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@bioplay
It was supposed to have "Equip 1 mana symbol" Copy/Paste went wrong -.- haha

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Mon, 2016-10-31 04:40
Yoshi
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Up: Honestly not keen on the power level of a 2/2 flier for 1 mana symbolWhite mana symbol on it's own, given say, Wind Drake. Also, that's some pretty hefty upside that worries me. Maybe better at White mana symbolWhite mana symbol and Rare?

Leaking Crow 1 mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Bird Uncommon
Flying
3 mana symbol: CARDNAME gets -3/-0 until end of turn. Any opponent may activate this ability.
This crow believes there is no flaw in it's plan. How wrong it was.
2/2

Old: Bird
New: Landfall

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Mon, 2016-10-31 08:25
Mort
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Reminds me a lot of Oona's Prowler though I feel that aesthetically the power penalty should be -2 for 2 mana symbol as the -3 penalty just seems a little out of place on the 2/2.

Adventurous Chick Blue mana symbol
Creature - Bird Common
Landfall - Whenever a land enters the battlefield under you control, ~ gains flying until end of turn.
1/1

Old: Landfall
New: Non-permanent

Mon, 2016-10-31 17:31
Xenagos
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Up: Well designed, perfectly balanced, good flavor. 10/10

Faith of the Phoenix 1 mana symbolRed mana symbol
Instant Rare
Landfall -- Whenever a land enters the battlefield under your control, if Faith of the Phoenix is in your graveyard, you may pay 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol. If you do, return Faith of the Phoenix from your graveyard to your hand.
Until end of turn, target creature becomes a red Phoenix with base power and toughness 3/1, loses all abilities, and gains flying and haste.

Old: Non-permanent
New: Has two or more non-evergreen keywords

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Mon, 2016-10-31 17:49
Mocandragon5
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Up: You don't need to say 'loses all abilities', just 'Until end of turn, target creature becomes a 3/1 red Phoenix with flying and haste.' You already used 'becomes', inferring it changes into something else, and not just gaining abilities and types. Otherwise, nice card.

Selesnya's Call 3 mana symbolGreen mana symbolGreen mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol
Sorcery Rare
Convoke
Create a 3/3 green elephant creature token, populate for each creature tapped to cast ~, then gain 2 life for each creature token you control.

Old: Two or more non-evergreen keywords.
New: Contains a Ravnica guild, Alara shard, dragon brood or Tarkir clan in its name.

Mon, 2016-10-31 18:17
Vunik
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Up: Interesting card. I like it, especially since it (at the very least) gives you blockers for the creatures you tapped. (And as a life gain player, 2 life per isn't bad either.)

Warrior of Bant Green mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Human Soldier Rare
Exalted (Whenever a creature you control attacks alone, that creature gets +1/+1 until end of turn.)
Flanking (Whenever a creature without flanking blocks this creature, the blocking creature gets -1/-1 until end of turn.)
3/3

Old: Contains a Ravnica guild, Alara shard, dragon brood or Tarkir clan in its name.
New: No colorless mana in the mana cost.

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Tue, 2016-11-01 02:35
ZephyrPhantom
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Up: Interesting way to discourage blocks, would fit quite nicely into a Time Spiral block IMHO.

Serpentlord Ojutai Red mana symbolRed mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Elder Snake Mythic Rare
Haste
~ has double strike as long it's tapped.
Whenever Dragonlord Ojutai deals combat damage to a player, exile the top card of your library. You may play it this turn.
2/4

Old: No colorless mana in the mana cost.
New: Eldrazi


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Tue, 2016-11-01 03:30
Yoshi
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Up: Strong but quite interesting. Feels nice for a timeshifted variant, and I like it, though it doesn't feel very Black mana symbol.

Timeline Eater
Creature - Eldrazi Horror Rare
Put a suspended card you own in exile into your graveyard: Put CARDNAME onto the battlefield.
At the beginning of your upkeep, each player puts a card they own in exile in their graveyard. If a card is put into a graveyard this way, that card's owner exiles the top card of their library and puts four time counters on it. If that card isn't a land and doesn't have suspend, it gains suspend.
1/6

Old: Eldrazi.
New: From Ravnica.

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Tue, 2016-11-01 03:28
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@ Yoshi - What happens if the top card is a land? Does it just fail to go off after the four time counters expire or would you be tweaking suspend wording to fit as well?


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Sun, 2016-11-06 16:39
jacqui-pup
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Up: Wha??? I think this is too good, not sure. Also kind of a cheaty way to do this. And should be a processor, right.

Grafted Scion 2 mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Creature - Eldrazi Mutant Drone Common
When ~ enters the battlefield, inculcate. (Put a +1/+1 counter on target creature that's one or more colors. It becomes colorless.)
Graft 2 (This creature enters the battlefield with two +1/+1 counters on it. Whenever another creature enters the battlefield, you may move a +1/+1 counter from this creature onto it.)
2/2

OLD: From Ravnica
NEW: Tricolored.

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Sun, 2016-11-06 17:18
Vunik
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Up: Interesting idea. I really like inculcate as an Eldrazi mechanic. Although, I think 3 CMC for a total of 5 power and toughness is a little strong.

Cross-Guild Champion Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Human Soldier Rare
Whenever Cross-Guild Champion attacks, choose one:
* Target player gains 2 life.
* Target player puts the top card of his or her library into his or her graveyard.
"I will prove that the guilds are stronger together!
3/2

Old: Tricolored
New: Noncreature.

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Sun, 2016-11-06 20:03
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UP: Generally speaking, a card that has three colors of mana in its cost is going to be stronger than a monocolor card of the same cost. And yet, this is a 3/2 for CMC3 (not that strong) that can gain you two life a turn or mill 1... neither of which are strong attack triggers. What's the guild synergy here? I have no idea if this is Izzet/Boros or Izzet/Azorius or what. If I opened this as a rare I would flip the table. For funsies, I tried to redesign it to be more appropriate for its power level:

Crossguild Champion 2 Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Human Soldier Rare
Whenever you attack with three or more creatures, detain target permanent.
4/2

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Delver's Mantle Black mana symbolGreen mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Enchantment - Aura Uncommon
Enchant creature
2 mana symbol, Exile a card from your graveyard: Enchanted creature gets +X/+X until end of turn, where X is the converted mana cost of the exiled card.

OLD: Noncreature
NEW: Mana cost contains 5 mana symbol.

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Sun, 2016-11-06 20:14
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Up: Eh. That's a very, very high setup cost, considering the inherent disadvantage problem with Auras. Self-mill could make it good, I suppose, but still.

Think It Over 5 mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Sorcery Uncommon
Focus - Think It Over costs 3 mana symbol less to cast if there are three or fewer cards in your hand.
Draw three cards.
"Shut up. Give me a moment."

Old: Mana cost contains 5 mana symbol.
New: Features at least three instances of a single number. (For example, the rules text of Think It Over includes three instances of the number three.)

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Set Huwb
They/them pronouns, please.
Praise Vectron.

Sun, 2016-11-06 20:30
Flo00
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Up: I think three or fewer is a little too easy to acomplish. It means you had four cards when you played Think it over. Two or less would make it more interesting.

Yes, that's as uncreative as it can get 5 mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Creature - Elemental Common
I couldn't even think of a propper flavour text.
5/5

Old: Features at least three instances of a single number. (For example, my card has a 5 in the cost, 5 power and 5 toughness.)
New: Planeswalker

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Mon, 2016-11-07 21:43
Mocandragon5
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Up: Seems to be an okay vanilla creature, however I can't get over that name.

Tibalt, Bloodletter 3 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Planeswalker - Tibalt Mythic Rare
+2 Loyalty ~ deals 3 damage to target creature.
-5 Loyalty Create a 3/3 red Devil creature token with haste and "When this creature dies, it deals 3 damage to target creature."
-10 Loyalty Each opponent may sacrifice any number of nonland permanents they control. For each nonland permanent they don't sacrifice, ~ deals 5 damage to that player.
\4/

(If you're wondering, I chose 3 as 333 was the original number of the devil.)

Old: Planeswalker.
New: Planeshifted (Colourshifted) version of an existing character.

Mon, 2016-11-07 03:54
Wapulatus
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Up: I believe you have a contradiction of terms here, sir. This card is Tibalt, yet it is adequately designed and powerful at the same time. In all seriousness, It's a nice card. Nothing is too overpowered, and anybody using a creature-based strategy is going to be in a frenzied sweat after you cast this. Nice bit of flavor there, too.

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Tamiyo, the Flesh Scribe - Green mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlack mana symbol

Planeswalker - Tamiyo Mythic Rare

+1 Loyalty : Choose up to two target creatures. Until your next turn, whenever either of those creatures deals combat damage, target player discards a card.

-1 Loyalty : Draw X cards and lose X life, where X is the number of creatures that died this turn.

-5 Loyalty : Gain control of target creature, then put target creature from your graveyard onto the battlefield.

[3]

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Next : Not a planeswalker and not a legendary.

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Mon, 2016-11-07 04:29
Vunik
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Up: Interesting colorshift. I like it, although only the first ability is a colorshift of SoI Tamiyo (which I imagine was the inspiration).

Angel of Dawn's Fall 5 mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Creature - Angel Rare
Flying
When Angel of Dawn's Fall enters the battlefield, exile all Humans, then return all Zombie creature cards from your graveyard to the battlefield.
4/6
(Colorshift of Angel of Glory's Rise)

Old: Not a planeswalker and not a legendary.
New: References a planeswalker or legendary creature (either through flavor or rules text).

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Mon, 2016-11-07 04:57
Yoshi
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Up: I like it. It works pretty well.

Phantasmal Fighter 2 mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Illusion Uncommon
When CARDNAME enters the battlefield, sacrifice it unless you exile two cards from your hand face-down until CARDNAME leaves the battlefield.
Whenever you activate a loyalty ability of a Jace planeswalker you control, you may put a card exiled with CARDNAME into your hand.
Formed of thought, made to pummel those who cannot think.
4/4

Old: References a legendary creature or planeswalker in some way.
New: Uncommon.

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Tue, 2016-11-08 00:20
Mocandragon5
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Up: Perhaps reword the first ability. Otherwise, solid card.

Stone-Crusher Snake 1 mana symbolGreen mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Creature - Snake Uncommon
Deathtouch
Whenever a creature dealt damage by ~ this turn dies, put a +1/+1 counter on ~.
Some creatures welcome Vraska's unique brand of assassination.
2/2

Old: Uncommon.
New: Creates a token copy of something.

Tue, 2016-11-08 00:27
Xenagos
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@Yoshi: I love it. Fantastic design.

@Mocandragon5: Seems fine, although the two abilities have no real synergy. You met the challenge in an interesting way, that's cool!

Seek Heat Red mana symbolBlue mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Sorcery Uncommon
Exile the top card of your library. If it's a creature card, create a token that's a copy of it. Otherwise, you may cast it this turn.

Old: Creates a token copy of something.
New: Has X in its mana cost.

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Tue, 2016-11-08 03:24
bioplay
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Seek Heat: Could use a better name, but very cool way to meld those three different colors into an uncommon sorcery. Also, the correct order of mana symbols is Green mana symbolBlue mana symbolRed mana symbol for Temur on Tarkir, or Blue mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol for that color combination anywhere else, but that's super nitpicky. Well done! 10/10

Fiery Phantasmagoria X mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Sorcery Rare
Create a token copy of X target creatures. Those tokens gain haste. Exile them at the beginning of the next end step. CARDNAME deals X damage to you.
"Burning silhouettes,
Blazing shadows.
Fiery epitaphs,
Flaming gallows."
-Erdwal childrens' chant

Previous: Has X mana symbol in its mana cost.
Next: Rules text does not contain "target" or "damage"

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Tue, 2016-11-08 13:43
Flo00
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Up: Even with the X damage this is way too strong. Maybe for X mana symbolX mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol it would be ok.

Continental Collision X mana symbolRed mana symbol
Sorcery Rare
Converge — Each player sacrifices X lands, where X is the number of colors of mana spent to cast Continental Collision.

Old: Rules text does not contain "target" or "damage"
New: Instant

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Tue, 2016-11-08 18:45
Mort
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Up: Not a huge fan of Land Destruction, but the additional colours needed to converge does restrict this enough that I don't think this is as oppressive as something like Tectonic Break with some cheap Red mana symbol threats.

Resounding Dismissal 1 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Instant Rare
Strive - This spell costs Blue mana symbol more for each target beyond the first.
Counter target Spell.

Old: Instant
New: Costless (Living End, Wheel of Fate, Evermind, etc.)

Tue, 2016-11-08 18:50
thehuw
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Up: Needs to read "counter any number of target spells" for strive to work the way you want it to, and I think this is a bit more upside than I'm comfortable with for a three-mana hard counter even at rare.

Blindthunder
Instant Uncommon (The lack of color identity is intentional. This card is colorless, and uses the same clear frame as the true-colorless Eldrazi.)
Emerge 2 mana symbolRed mana symbol
Blindthunder deals 3 damage to target creature or player.

Old: Has no mana cost.
New: A permanent.

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Set Huwb
They/them pronouns, please.
Praise Vectron.

Tue, 2016-11-08 20:05
Yoshi
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Up: That's simple and elegant, and although it might not see play, I could definitely see it printed in something like future sight.

Endless Horde
Creature - Zombie Rare Black color identity
When CARDNAME enters the battlefield, create a 2/2 black Zombie creature token.
CARDNAME's power and toughness are each equal to the number of Zombies you control.
Evoke 1 mana symbolBlack mana symbol, Dash 3 mana symbolBlack mana symbol
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Old: Permanent
New: Four-colored.

December 2017 - R32 - "We are more than just rank and file..."
February 2018 - DDH - "Remember that overconfidence is a slow and insidious killer."

I stand with the specimen.

Tue, 2016-11-08 20:13
Reality Glitch
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Hmm.... The Emerge cost might be a tad under costed, but I like the concept.

Wishmaster
Planeswalker -- Wishmaster Mythic Rare 4
4 mana symbol: Put ~ from exile onto the battlefield.
+2 Loyalty: Exile face down a card you own if exile or from outside the game. You may look at it for as long as it remains in exile.
-X Loyalty: Until your next turn you may play up to one face up card you or face down that you can look at with a cmc of X or less you own in exile.

Old: Permanent
New: designed with a grand enchantment/instant/sorcery type update in mind. (All three card types share a subtype list with subtypes like Air/Water/Earth/Fire/Life/Death/Light/Shadow/Arcane/Divine/etc. Aura is no longer a subtype, instead they are referred to as "enchantments with enchant".)

Tue, 2016-11-08 22:05
marioware2
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Up: Yeesh. I wouldn't want to see Endless Horde cast against me. I think the Dash creatures were generally less powerful than that (Mardu Strike Leader comes to mind), as they could just be cast over and over and over and over and...yeah. You get the point. A neat way to modify your card would be to make it a "leaves the battlefield" trigger - that way it can't attack as a 2/2 the first turn, which is minor, but relevant. Also the token should almost certainly ETB tapped.

Exemplar of Rebirth 3 mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlack mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Creature - Spirit Mythic Rare
When ~ dies, you may exile it. If you do, for each card type, return up to one card of that type from your graveyard to your hand.
A chilling reminder of the briefness of both life and death.
5/5

Old: Four-colored
New: Noncreature!

Sat, 2016-11-12 17:20
jacqui-pup
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UP: Interesting. Don't quite get why this isn't just Green mana symbol honestly?

Will Blue mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Instant Rare
Counter target spell. You lose life equal to its converted mana cost.
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Grace Green mana symbolWhite mana symbol
Instant Rare
Exile target artifact or enchantment. You gain life equal to its converted mana cost.

Old: Noncreature
New: Has a mana cost that doesn't exist in canon Magic. (IE, White/black mana symbolWhite/black mana symbolWhite/black mana symbolWhite/black mana symbol, X mana symbolX mana symbolWhite mana symbol, Phyrexian Blue ManaPhyrexian Blue Mana)

[center]"It's exciting to create something that demonstrates how clever you are, that you pushed in a direction that players didn't anticipate. The problem is that the point of game design isn't to be clever, it's to create a great game." --Mark Rosewater

Sat, 2016-11-12 17:57
Mocandragon5
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Up: Both sides seem to be balanced, though Will could potentially be stronger.

Planar Obliteration Phyrexian White ManaPhyrexian White ManaPhyrexian Blue ManaPhyrexian Blue ManaPhyrexian Black ManaPhyrexian Black ManaPhyrexian Red ManaPhyrexian Red ManaPhyrexian Green ManaPhyrexian Green Mana
Sorcery Mythic Rare
(Phyrexian White Mana can be paid with either White mana symbol or 2 life.)
Exile all creatures. ~ deals 5 damage to each player, then each player may sacrifice each permanent they control. For each permanent they don't sacrifice, that player loses 2 life. Each player creates a 5/5 green Horror creature token with hexproof.

Old: Has a mana cost that doesn't exist in canon Magic. (IE, White/black mana symbolWhite/black mana symbolWhite/black mana symbolWhite/black mana symbol, X mana symbolX mana symbolWhite mana symbol, Phyrexian Blue ManaPhyrexian Blue Mana)
New: A canon, non-gatewatch planeswalker.

Fri, 2016-11-18 05:55
Yoshi
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Let's unclog this.

Up: This is huge. I think it's probably busted in some way, given how much it does. Still, can't really see how it would be borked right now, though maybe I'm just tired.

Welcome to AU Innistrad. Tamiyo has been enslaved by Emrakul after the Eldrazi victory over Innistrad...

Tamiyo'Krul, Nulleye A 2/U hybrid mana symbol.A 2/U hybrid mana symbol.A 2/U hybrid mana symbol.A 2/U hybrid mana symbol.
Planeswalker - Tamiyo'Krul Mythic Rare
+2 Loyalty: Put the bottom four cards of your library into your hand, then exile three cards from your hand.
-4 Loyalty: Until end of turn, you may play colorless cards and noncreature cards from exile.
-12 Loyalty: Put each card in exile into its owner's graveyard. For each card put into a graveyard this way, put the bottom card of your library into your hand. If you would fail to do so this turn, you win the game instead.
SL: [4]

Old: Nongatewatch planeswalker, canon.
New: 5-mana.

December 2017 - R32 - "We are more than just rank and file..."
February 2018 - DDH - "Remember that overconfidence is a slow and insidious killer."

I stand with the specimen.

Fri, 2016-11-18 06:33
Vunik
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Up: Interesting, but I feel like I've seen the idea before (lol). Really, though, assuming you use the blue side and not the colorless, the ultimate is probably pushed. Yeah, it takes 4 turns to get it off, and from the moment you play her she's targeted, but if you're really playing draw-based blue, you are probably playing control, so that's not a danger.

Jaya Ballard 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Planeswalker - Jaya Mythic Rare
+1 Loyalty: Jaya Ballard deals 3 damage to target creature. It can't be regenerated this turn.
-5 Loyalty: Jaya Ballard deals 6 damage to each creature and each player.
-8 Loyalty: Jaya Ballard deals 2 damage to any number of players. Players dealt damage this way get an emblem with "Whenever you tap a land, this emblem deals 2 damage to you."
<3>

(Probably too powerful, but let's say it her pre-mending form.)

Old: 5 mana
New: Only has 1 or 2 lines of rules text

Vunik's Neverending Hub

TWOK is the best!

Fri, 2016-11-18 10:10
thehuw
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Up: Sure is a Jaya-esque card, and has the scary power level of a pre-Mending planeswalker. Normally I'd be concerned about removal that strong as a plus ability, but at five mana and triple-density it's probably okay, if a little on the pushed side. Should say "up to one", though, so you don't have to blow up your own creatures if your opponent has no viable targets. And I'm not sure if I like that she effectively has two ultimates - the -5 is definitely ultimate-caliber.

Freezing Wind 3 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Instant Uncommon
All blocking creatures have base power 0 until end of turn.

Old: 5 mana.
New: Mythic.

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Set Huwb
They/them pronouns, please.
Praise Vectron.