Dark Moon

Wed, 2010-08-25 21:00
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Dark Moon
Jirala

The Plane of Jirala is plagued with war, as no one seems to get along. The tension grew great when the Dark Moon appeared in the sky. The former Mages Guild created a powerful spell, turning the moon blood red, allowing them to raise the dead and build forces of zombies. The Many different groups needed little to bring themselves to war, and the transmutation from the Mages Guild into the Necromancers Guild sent nearly everyone over the top. Everyone turned to extremists and the Cultists of Varune completed a ritual to summon forth the Demon Lord himself and his minions. Baltek saw this chaos as a chance to bring forth his plans to flood the earth and the Knights took up arms and left to battle the unholy threats and bring the world to one of order and law. The Minotaur stayed in their home but green more aggressive to intruders than ever before. The Plane had gone to war, and everyone was alone in the fight.

Keywords:

Purity - As long as you control only COLOR or colorless permanents, EFFECT
Soiled - As long as an opponent controls a COLOR permanent, EFFECT

Ambush NUMBER-COST (If NUMBER or more creatures are attacking you this turn you may play this card for COST, if you do it comes into play blocking a creature.)
Convert - COST, Exile this card from your graveyard: EFFECT
Reflect - When this card becomes the target of a spell, EFFECT
Tyrannize NUMBER (Creatures with converted mana cost NUMBER or less can't block this creature.)

White mana symbol Knights of the Silver Hand White mana symbol

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The Knights of the Silver Hand is an organization of holy warriors whose goal is to eradicate chaos and amorality from the lands. They hold great hatred for the Demons and Minions of Varune as well as the undead servants and those in charge of the Necromancers guild, the largest perpetrators of chaos and amorality. They hold no alliance with the Following of Baltek, believing their sneaky methods of control to be below them. They also hold no respect for the Minotaur of Greenwood, as they refuse to take any preventive action against the others.

Knights of the Silver Hand show great respect and admiration for the mighty angels they fight along side in an effort to bring order and morality back to the world. It is said in legends that a knight that braves any foe and fights for his beliefs to death would become an Angel themselves.

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Blue mana symbol Following of Baltek Blue mana symbol

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The Following of Baltek is a group of sea fairing creatures that all work together and serve under Baltek, the King of the ocean and a self proclaimed god. They wish to flood the lands till no mountain remains above its serface. They hold great contempt for the Demons of Varune, who wish to smoulder the entire planet to ash and stone, and turn the seas to barren valleys. Baltek has declared war against the Minotaur of Greenwood, as they constant fight against him, and defend their home from his influence, which prevents a majority of his forces from advancing.

Followers of Baltek try to flood and cripple their opponents land and taint their mana to make their assaults go unnoticed. The many races of the following are typically made up of human mages, serpents, and elementals. Baltek is willing to accept any exiles from the others so long as they serve him till their deaths; although, none know if they are truly exiles or were mind controlled by the Sovereign himself.

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Black mana symbol Necromancer’s Guild Black mana symbol

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The Necromancer’s Guild is a guild of powerful mages that devote their life and energy to the reanimation of the dead and the corruption of life. They wish to have dominance of all living beings and for them to serve in both life and death. It is the Necromancers guild that lingers the Dark Moon in the sky. They have great distaste for the Knights of the Silver Hand, as they actively defy and search for ways to destroy their armies. The Minotaur of Greenwood is a enemy of the Guild as the forest is home to many dead beasts the guild would love to animate, but the minotaur fight to keep them out of the Greenwood. They dislike the following as they are a threat to their control, and the Demons because their chaotic nature is unpredictable.

The guild has no respect for anyone, even among it’s own ranks, they seek only to benefit themselves, not the guild. Assassination and internal strife is common among their ranks. They will build grand armies of mindless minions to march through a battlefield.


Red mana symbol Servants of Varune Red mana symbol

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The Servants of Varune is a dangerous cult that follows the mighty demon Varune and obeys the wishes of his many demon minions. They hold no belief but that of Varune and his will. They actively seek out opportunities to bring chaos into the world, ignoring their own well being in most cases. They hate the Knights of the Silver Hand as they fight the demons with not fear and with great vigour. The Following is their primary threat, as the demons greatly dislike the ocean and wish to cover the oceans in molten stone. They wish to eliminate the Greenwood, but choose not to act yet as the Minotaur do not actively seek them out. The Guild is a threat to them, yet the Demons enjoy watching the guilds actions and wish to save them till the end to destroy.

The Servants worship the demons and serve them at every opportunity. The acolyte’s believe the demons will let them live should they continue serving them, yet the demons care only care for the fun evoked from chaos and ruin, not fro the lives of their acolytes.


Green mana symbol Minotaur of Greenwood Green mana symbol

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The Minotaur of Greenwood is a group of mighty and powerful Minotaur living in the huge forest of Greenwood, coving nearly a third of the land mass. Even so they defend against the threats from the Following on the coasts and the Guild everywhere else. Although the vast majority is made of Minotaur, a large number of other races aid in the protection of their wood, including some elves. They wish to live in solitude, uninterrupted and away from the other groups, but defend themselves when the others come into their territory, and fight to take it back if they loose some.

The Minotaur use little magic and rely on brute force to keep themselves safe, they are violent, and will attack anything at comes into their woods, trying to keep the forest pure. It is common for the Minotaur to fight to their deaths and never retreat, even if their position seems hopeless.


All Artwork should be credited, if you see one that is not, please let me know, I'll take it down and replace with a credited one as soon as I can.

The card formating probably isn't perfect, so any corrections is welcome. Comments of balancing/etc... is welcome.

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Wed, 2010-08-25 21:15
Anuttymous
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Not checked the cards yet, but I will do at some point. Reason is, I noticed you have a lot of custom keywords. I'll tell you before someone screams it at you:
There should only be about 2 new keywords and one or two old keywords returning. If you build it into a block, you could have two custom keywords in each set, thus three sets.
now, change it before someone comes in and kills you about it.

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Wed, 2010-08-25 22:04
lord_joakim
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I agree with Anuttymous.

However, I must add:

- With a quick glance, the cards seem to be very flavorful and interesting. I think you did a good job.
- You need some work with wording & spelling, but that's secondary.
- As Anuttymous said, there really are a lot of keywords. Keep it with one to two keywords in the large set, then put some of the others in the remaining two.
- The keywords are really good though, and if anything, should be used by yourself in a future set you're making.

This is an overall good job, a very good one that is. It still needs some work, however.

Wed, 2010-08-25 22:19
Anuttymous
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Right, looked at the cards.

Aerothalio – VERY powerful, in a mono white deck, this could be a 9/5 with double and flying when it comes out, easily. That's insanely powerful. I suggest trading double strike with lifelink, or first strike. Or, for mythic, possibly both, though then it would be bordering on Baneslayer Angel, which is a bad idea to make it that good.

Captain of the Silver Hand – Quite powerful, maybe lose the “Nonwhite creatures get -1/-1”, but besides that, it looks alright.

Devoted Ally – A 3/3 Vigilance for two mana, most of the time, and the only drawback is that is forces itself to be the target. Which actually stops your opponent playing any boost effects. I suggest making it at least three mana.

Dragon Hatchlings – This would be abused for its second ability. I suggest making it “If you control four/five or more Dragons...” because you'd often have more than your opponent, unless you were playing against a Dragon deck. Also, you may want to up the cost to 5, as they're 2/2 for 2 mana each, basically, then most likely a free draw and life gain.

Flight of Feathers – Nothing much wrong with it, but I suggest don't make it common. You might get away with uncommon, can't see why not.

Golden Crest Griffin – Very overpowered. First turn 3/3 flier. Compared to Isamaru, which is also rare, and only 2/2. Maybe making it +1/+1 instead should be alright.

Guardian Griffin – should be a 1/2 instead, as this will often be a 2/2 flier first turn, which is rare at best.

Holy Ground – This is either very set specific, or you meant for it to be -X/-X instead.

Light Blade of Cleansing – Could easily cost 1 mana symbolWhite mana symbol, compared to Tempest of Light, which does what this would do, but much quicker.

Light of White Dragons – Maybe make it the same as Angel's Mercy, 2 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol, which is considerably a bad card.

Noble Dragon – Maybe not lifelink as well. One or the other, but not both, otherwise it could get very powerful, very quick.

Proud Wolf – Compared to Siege Mastodon and Caravan Hurda, you may want to change it, maybe 2/3?

Seraphim's Presence – A total of +6/+6, flying, lifelink AND double strike. Maybe a bit powerful. I think just keep it at +3/+3, and all the rest. Remove the second instance of +3/+3, perhaps?

Silver Cavalier – This seems more like a rare card. Maybe just if it's blocked by one specific colour, black for example, that might work?

Sword of the Silver Hand – Very expensive, when compared to Sword of Vengeance.

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Wed, 2010-08-25 23:37
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I wouldn't think 6 keywords too many, when there is no returning keywords, and none of them are complicated. Purity/Soiled are for all 5 colours, Tyrannize(Red | Green | Black), Ambush (Green | Black), Convert (Red | Blue | White), Reflect (White | Blue)

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Aerothalio – VERY powerful, in a mono white deck, this could be a 9/5 with double and flying when it comes out, easily. That's insanely powerful. I suggest trading double strike with lifelink, or first strike. Or, for mythic, possibly both, though then it would be bordering on Baneslayer Angel, which is a bad idea to make it that good.

I made him have first strike.

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Captain of the Silver Hand – Quite powerful, maybe lose the “Nonwhite creatures get -1/-1”, but besides that, it looks alright.

I tossed the nonwhite creatures getting -1/-1

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Devoted Ally – A 3/3 Vigilance for two mana, most of the time, and the only drawback is that is forces itself to be the target. Which actually stops your opponent playing any boost effects. I suggest making it at least three mana.

It doesn't stop boosting effects, it's only spells or abilities that target creature you control. Anyway, I removed his purity ability, left the rest alone.

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Dragon Hatchlings – This would be abused for its second ability. I suggest making it “If you control four/five or more Dragons...” because you'd often have more than your opponent, unless you were playing against a Dragon deck. Also, you may want to up the cost to 5, as they're 2/2 for 2 mana each, basically, then most likely a free draw and life gain.

4W cost now, and you only get the bonus for having atleast 4 dragons.

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Flight of Feathers – Nothing much wrong with it, but I suggest don't make it common. You might get away with uncommon, can't see why not.

I think its fine as a common, 3 mana for a 1/1 flyer is high, and you need to skip a draw to get the card back.

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Golden Crest Griffin – Very overpowered. First turn 3/3 flier. Compared to Isamaru, which is also rare, and only 2/2. Maybe making it +1/+1 instead should be alright.

Yes, I changed it to purity - +1/+1

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Guardian Griffin – should be a 1/2 instead, as this will often be a 2/2 flier first turn, which is rare at best.

I had as a 1/2 originally and I was told that was too weak, I'll waiting for further comments on him.

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Holy Ground – This is either very set specific, or you meant for it to be -X/-X instead.

Well, -x/-x only would effect things like -1/-1, what about -1/-2 or the like? or -4/-0? or -0/-3? This allows any of those effects to be reversed.

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Light Blade of Cleansing – Could easily cost 1 mana symbolWhite mana symbol, compared to Tempest of Light, which does what this would do, but much quicker.

I made it cost 1W

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Light of White Dragons – Maybe make it the same as Angel's Mercy, 2 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol, which is considerably a bad card.

2WW for 8 life.

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Noble Dragon – Maybe not lifelink as well. One or the other, but not both, otherwise it could get very powerful, very quick.

I tossed lifelink.

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Proud Wolf – Compared to Siege Mastodon and Caravan Hurda, you may want to change it, maybe 2/3?

2WW for a 2/4 lifelink

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Seraphim's Presence – A total of +6/+6, flying, lifelink AND double strike. Maybe a bit powerful. I think just keep it at +3/+3, and all the rest. Remove the second instance of +3/+3, perhaps?

I ditched the second +3/+3. But as a mythic rare I do want it to feel mythic.

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Silver Cavalier – This seems more like a rare card. Maybe just if it's blocked by one specific colour, black for example, that might work?

I made it red/black cards.

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Sword of the Silver Hand – Very expensive, when compared to Sword of Vengeance.

changed to a 2WW cost.

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Blue cards added.

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Thu, 2010-08-26 01:20
Anuttymous
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I wouldn't think 6 keywords too many, when there is no returning keywords, and none of them are complicated. Purity/Soiled are for all 5 colours, Tyrannize(Red | Green | Black), Ambush (Green | Black), Convert (Red | Blue | White), Reflect (White | Blue)

Just looking at it I'm confused! Believe me, look at Wizards, they're currently running 2/3 new keywords, and bringing back an old keyword or two. But they're making huge sets, full blown sets. Going for 6 new keywords is a HUGE stretch.

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It doesn't stop boosting effects, it's only spells or abilities that target creature you control. Anyway, I removed his purity ability, left the rest alone.

I missed the "that you control" part, that's probably fair then, without the purity.

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I think its fine as a common, 3 mana for a 1/1 flyer is high, and you need to skip a draw to get the card back.

I think it's fine as common, but in Limited, you don't want to be getting too many. The main reason for making cards uncommon, is to limit the number that will appear with a small pool of cards. If you maybe lowered the mana cost, and made it uncommon, it wouldn't end up being an annoying card that doesn't get used, rather than a card that would provoke people to create a combo. A card for Johnny, as it were.

You might have to check wording for -X/-Y becoming +X/+Y, it seems a bit strange to me. But, I guess it would work.

The double strike works just as good as giving +3/+3, both would be crazy. Have a look through some other enchantments for ideas to make it feel mythic? http://gatherer.wizards.com/Pages/Search/Default.aspx?action=advanced&type=+[%22Enchantment%22]&color=+@%28+[W]%29&rarity=|[R]&subtype=+[%22Aura%22]

Will look through blue cards shortly.

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Thu, 2010-08-26 01:36
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Just a random comment here: I really like how you made people WANT to play monocolored without making them feel at a disadvantage.

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Thu, 2010-08-26 02:00
Anuttymous
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Just a random comment here: I really like how you made people WANT to play monocolored without making them feel at a disadvantage.

I'm not seeing much multicoloured-promotion, I must say...

Darkwater Serpent – Compared to Nemesis of Reason, this is not very good. Maybe adjust to make it more affordable?

Dragon Hatcher – Should probably be rare, or cost a lot more, considering in the right deck this would be insane. Maybe change it so it only has the ability if you control a dragon.

Frozen Sentry – At rare I believe the Convert cost easily cost 1 mana.

Lord of Blue Dragons – For a mythic, it's not very powerful. You could probably make the convert 1 mana, considering it's unlikely to be able to kill it off, and it's only one use, and it's mythic.

Realm of Rapid Gain – Looks rather powerful, I think it should be mythic. You draw extra cards, which would make any deck scary, and then mana boost as well? Thorough playtesting would ensure the cards isn't too broken.

Silver Exile – What happens if I target is with a Giant Growth? Would it get +3,000,000/+3,000,000 if I chose? “And choose another target...”

Siren of Seas – Power and toughness? Probably only need 1/1 or 0/3.

Tears of Ice – Nonland card, otherwise this can be an ultimate first turn card.

Valley of the Floods - “In addition to their other types” otherwise this could be what they call a Time Walk situation.

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Thu, 2010-08-26 02:15
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I'm not seeing much multicoloured-promotion, I must say...

It's a mono-coloured set, where all colours are at war.

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Darkwater Serpent – Compared to Nemesis of Reason, this is not very good. Maybe adjust to make it more affordable?

I'll have to work on him a bit.

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Dragon Hatcher – Should probably be rare, or cost a lot more, considering in the right deck this would be insane. Maybe change it so it only has the ability if you control a dragon.

Hmm, That would probably work better flavour wise as well. Changed.

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Frozen Sentry – At rare I believe the Convert cost easily cost 1 mana.

Alright, changed.

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Lord of Blue Dragons – For a mythic, it's not very powerful. You could probably make the convert 1 mana, considering it's unlikely to be able to kill it off, and it's only one use, and it's mythic.

What if it gets discarded? Killed in combat? (A green deck could easily overwhelm a 6/6) and three blue to discard 3 cards is 1 for 1 and repeatable.

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Realm of Rapid Gain – Looks rather powerful, I think it should be mythic. You draw extra cards, which would make any deck scary, and then mana boost as well? Thorough playtesting would ensure the cards isn't too broken.

I'll have to think about this one for a bit. I may replace the mana accelleration with something else.

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Silver Exile – What happens if I target is with a Giant Growth? Would it get +3,000,000/+3,000,000 if I chose? “And choose another target...”

I think the wording should have been "choose a differet target" it's suppose to not be able to target him agian.

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Siren of Seas – Power and toughness? Probably only need 1/1 or 0/3.

Damn, figues I forget something.

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Tears of Ice – Nonland card, otherwise this can be an ultimate first turn card.

your probably right, it could be easy to mana screw someone with this.

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Valley of the Floods - “In addition to their other types” otherwise this could be what they call a Time Walk situation.

No, thats right. hey can still attack, use abilities, draw, etc...

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Thu, 2010-08-26 09:10
Anuttymous
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What if it gets discarded? Killed in combat?

It's mythic, the point is you might try to discard instead, just for ten cards (which is only worth two mana for rare - Glimpse the Unthinkable.)

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and three blue to discard 3 cards is 1 for 1 and repeatable.

That's still about 45 mana without help. Considering Tome Scour which does more, for less, this ability is relatively naff, but because it's reusable, it should still stay somewhat expensive.

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No, thats right. hey can still attack, use abilities, draw, etc...

True, but the main reason for the card isn't to stop them using land, it's to make your islandwalkers unblockable for a turn. Not to mention the cantrip, this card would be much more powerful than the card a short way above, that taps all lands they control for 4 mana.

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Thu, 2010-08-26 13:26
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Oy, there's a lot of cards to go through here, but I'm just going to take on one at the moment since I don't have time for anymore before work...

Sword of the Silver Hand: Nutty already addressed the cost issue here, but there's another, more important one to consider: why does it give them vigilance? Here's the scenario to trigger that:

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A black creature has to block it. To have that happen, the equipped creature has to have attacked, and if it didn't have vigilance when it attacked, it tapped. Giving it vigilance after it's tapped to attack won't untap it.

You also don't state duration for the effect. So if on turn 4 the equipped creature (say, a base 3/3) is blocked by a black creature, it'll become a 6/6 indefinitely. If on your opponent's turn it blocks a black creature, it's now a 9/9 indefinitely, and so on. Finally, terms like "from play" aren't even used anymore. You need to update the language of your card here.

I see what you're going for, but it'd have to be more like a tacking on of a "Then untap equipped creature" effect. Taking into account your previous statement about the CMC change, I'd rework it as this:

Sword of the Silver Hand 2 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol
Legendary Artifact - Equipment Rare
Whenever equipped creature blocks or becomes blocked by a black creature, it gets +3/+3 and has first strike and lifelink until end of turn. Untap the equipped creature.
If ~ would enter a graveyard from the battlefield, its owner shuffles it into his or her library instead.
Equip 2 mana symbolWhite mana symbol

All in all, just reviewing this one card I can see you most likely have to check your grammar and terminology, as well the power level of your cards and how they are affected by the rules. I'm not trying to knock you or anything, tons of cards come through like this all the time, and I'm just trying to point you in the direction of making these cards better and more playable.

Thu, 2010-08-26 14:46
Anuttymous
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A black creature has to block it. To have that happen, the equipped creature has to have attacked, and if it didn't have vigilance when it attacked, it tapped. Giving it vigilance after it's tapped to attack won't untap it.

I think it was meant to read:

Equipped creature gets +3/+3 as long as it's blocking a black creature.
Equipped creature has vigilance, etc...

If you look at the way it's worded, I think that was how it was meant to be, that's why I didn't point anything out.

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Thu, 2010-08-26 17:00
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Thanks for the tips.

Yes, terminology is a tough spot. In my grop of friends we use cards from alpha to 2011, and a vast majority of them use the older wording. But atleast I don't word like portal .

And yes, the Sword was ment to give +3/+3 until end of turn against a black creature. And First strike, lifelink, vigilance always.

@Art_Freak: And don't worry about being so polite when correcting me - If I'm wrong, then I'm wrong, I'll admit it, and if I feel the need to debate a topic, I will

I can see what you mean about Valley of the Flood, bu there is a reason its a uncommon, not a common. - Perhaps if I remove the Draw Effect?

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Thu, 2010-08-26 23:14
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Wow, it would have been better to post less at once. There is a lot. Anyways, comments on the keywords issue.

First, although six is quite pushing it, that doesn't mean it is out of reach. Also, Wizards does usually bring back old keywords, but that doesn't mean you HAVE too. There are other ways to pay homage to the past. Now, what many people forget when designing a set is that you have themes which do not neccessarily have to be keywords. Why do you think Alara never keyworded "creatures with power 5 or more" or "whenever a creature is put into a graveyard from the battlefield"? The answer is they didn't need to. The theme was apparent anyways and they had enough keywords. Actually most of these are ability words anyways.

Purity - This is best served as an ability word.
Soiled - This shouldn't be an ability word. There is no link between the different effects here. The only thing that might link them is hating on other colors but even then not all effects are hating! This is almost like keywording Deathmark, Celestial Purge, Autumns Veil, Combust, and Flashfreeze. This theme will work just as good and probably better not worded.
Convert - Doesn't need the ability word but I think players would like refering to these as convert cards so stick with it.
Reflect - Also doesn't need an ability word on this. An effect like this shouldn't be on a lot of cards. I don't have time to look at the entire set to see everything you've done, but I wouldn't think a theme like this should be prevelant enough to be worded. It competes with shroud and "can't be the target of spells or effects your opponent controls".
Tyrranize - Def needs the keyword. Good one too.

Some card comments:

Case in Gold - I really like this card. It is pretty cool indeed.

Cloud Chaser - I would run 2 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol so as not to limit to only monowhite decks.

Holy Ground - "If an effect would reduce a creature's power ot toughness, it instead raises it by that much." This is how it should be worded plus gets rid of the clunky x and y.

Dragon Hatchlings - Hmmmm... don't get the little baby WHITE dragons...

Faith - "lose" and how about gaining 10 life. 15 is a lot and a really weird number to pick. It just doesn't look or feel right.

Fields of Ice - Nice card.

Golden Crest Griffin - Still too aggresive. Even a 1/1 one drop flyer is considered aggresive. Add another bonus and it gets worse. Costed at 1 mana symbolWhite mana symbol and it is perfect and still very aggresive.

Holy Essence - See how landfall was used in Zendikar and Worldwake. It didn't appear on spells until the second set. I would suggest the same here. Use it only on permanents in the first set and then save this for the second.

Light Blade of Cleansing - Was this meant to be a choice? If so, it needs a reword.

Light of Silver Cathedral - See use this instead of Holy Essence. They fill the same design space.

Mirror Shield - Which creature does it target? It's a mystery!

Revival of the Brave - When referring to CMC you say 3 not 3 mana symbol.

Silver Cavalier - Nice card. I don't think it needs the drawback though.

That is it for now.

A general comment. You need to use "gains" and "have" properly. Static effects are "have" or "has". Temporary effects like "until end of turn" are "gains". (For instance War Gear of Brilliance should read "has vigilance")

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Fri, 2010-08-27 00:50
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@Nutty: I read them as I see them. It wasn't separated, so I took it as one effect triggered by blocking or being blocked by a black creature. Sorry if I seemed to be calling you on missing something important, I simply saying that my biggest concern was the effect that to me, made no sense. I could see what he was getting at, but it was poorly executed and didn't make a whole lot of sense because of it.

Fri, 2010-08-27 13:01
Anuttymous
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@Nutty: I read them as I see them. It wasn't separated, so I took it as one effect triggered by blocking or being blocked by a black creature. Sorry if I seemed to be calling you on missing something important, I simply saying that my biggest concern was the effect that to me, made no sense. I could see what he was getting at, but it was poorly executed and didn't make a whole lot of sense because of it.

No, no, I wouldn't pointed it out, but then I realised that it was probably just bad wording, and I generally don't bother correcting wording, because it would make me start getting picky and end up redoing someone's whole set. I just stick to balancing the cards as best I can, than making every card I see correctly worded. Either, good idea to point it out and clear it up.

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