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Fri, 2009-08-14 07:52
copapoc	unkown i made a set based of with this limited bit of text (yeah i know ... it sucks) Spoiler: this is the plane of the gathering, and as every being has a minature fragment of the spark, they come from far, beyond the boundary's of the planes to prove their strenght the great, the evil, the wicked they journey here ... to find their end ... to learn of those of others also there is this card spoiler of some cards i made already they are all very high cost and most of them are very overpowerd that's why these forums are here ^^ enjoy Spoiler: here please give me some feedback EDIT i am now a bit further (on 94 cards) i still havent redone all cards i think -_-' still herea set file update a gain i think there are a gaint numper of powerlevel mistakes since i can't be a judge on that ^^ alive and kicking relics of alara

Fri, 2009-08-14 07:52

copapoc

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i made a set based of with this limited bit of text (yeah i know ... it sucks)

Spoiler:

this is the plane of the gathering, and as every being has a minature fragment of the spark, they come from far, beyond the boundary's of the planes to prove their strenght
the great, the evil, the wicked
they journey here ... to find their end ... to learn of those of others

also there is this card spoiler of some cards i made already
they are all very high cost and most of them are very overpowerd
that's why these forums are here ^^ enjoy

Spoiler:

here

please give me some feedback

EDIT
i am now a bit further (on 94 cards)
i still havent redone all cards i think -_-'
still herea set file update
a gain i think there are a gaint numper of powerlevel mistakes since i can't be a judge on that ^^

alive and kicking relics of alara

Sat, 2009-08-15 20:19
monkeychewtoy	The Very Top of a Professional Pro Tip: You can always edit the first post of a thread you created. And you can always delete your last post if no one has clicked that particular 'reply' link. And editing a first post bumps a thread and labels it new. And double posting is severely frowned upon by the moderators here. So copy your second post, delete it, and edit it into your first before Pichoro has to do it by hand. I've got your sets downloaded and am browsing them now. I'll review them soon. September 21, 2007: Monkeychewtoy predicts monocolored hybrid cards, calls them "Ridiculous."

Sat, 2009-08-15 20:19

monkeychewtoy

The Very Top of a Professional

Pro Tip: You can always edit the first post of a thread you created. And you can always delete your last post if no one has clicked that particular 'reply' link. And editing a first post bumps a thread and labels it new. And double posting is severely frowned upon by the moderators here.

So copy your second post, delete it, and edit it into your first before Pichoro has to do it by hand.

I've got your sets downloaded and am browsing them now. I'll review them soon.

September 21, 2007: Monkeychewtoy predicts monocolored hybrid cards, calls them "Ridiculous."

Sun, 2009-08-16 10:09
copapoc	well ^^ i gota say one thing well ^^ i gota say one thing ^^ after i went tru again i can see there are a lot o mayor desing mistakes so i have a new one ready from the moment the tread is updated agian alive and kicking relics of alara

Thu, 2009-08-20 07:42
monkeychewtoy	Clash of the Titans Before I begin, I want to say that I like the theme of your set: Titanic forces collide and wake their world. I think, then, that clash is an appropriate keyword to have spread across the colors, because it offers one more way to get across the point that these are powerful, warring forces. But I'll be honest. The rest of your set is... problematic. Spoiler: Heal is by far a worse card than Healing Salve. Compare Disciple of the Leviathan to Merfolk Looter. No card in the history of Magic has a land searching ability like this one, even assuming the "then shuffle your library" clause. And if a card did, that card would be green. Compare Frost Drake to Azure Drake, and then notice that [url=http://gatherer.wizards.com/Pages/Search/Default.aspx?text=+[threshold]]all cards with Threshold[/url] reference seven cards, specifically. While the Panglacial Wurm ability might make more sense in blue than it does in green, but this sort of unrestricted Haakon ability doesn't even make sense in black. It renders almost every kill spell and burn spell useless. Oh, and you forgot a power and toughness. Leviathan of the Deep is actually a pretty okay card. It reminds of older, major-drawback, Leviathans. Probably one of your best made cards. Stop is an interesting design, though it's name is too close to silver borders and I have no idea how a Leviathan moves at instant speed. Or why it's looking at the top card of my library, for that matter. Anyway, the idea of a one-mana hard counter is enticing enough to play it even though it will only work maybe a third of the time. Another good one. Kill is far better than Terror if you win, and a waste of cardboard if you lose. It's also a lame name. Kizar of the Cave has a proper name but is not legendary. For some reason, he is snow. His mana cost is what they call in the military, "fubar." I'm not going to tell you what that means, but I'll tell you it's not good. For his ability, you should probably be using a template like Azorius Herald has. The Dark also has a proper name, but is not legendary. Flying and deathtouch don't go well together. Think about it. The entire point of flying is to not hit anything. How do you deathtouch things you're evading? Compare Dragon Wizard to Lightning Crafter. This wonderful wiz is overpowered. Dragon's Soul is another one of your good cards. Firebreathing + Flight suggest that this card would be better cost at , but seems okay, although an aura giving flying is a real stretch for red. Lash Out is probably better than Hit. Actually, Hit is better than Hit. The Haakon ability makes more sense on Infernal Phoenix, but the Panglacial Wurm ability makes less sense. And the Haakon bit is going to be overpowered no matter what power and toughness you give this. Keeper of the Forge is kind of cool, but red hates artifacts. It would also make more sense if the Keeper of the Forge was protected from artifacts the way Keeper of Kookus is protected from Kookus. When you're done with Spirit of the Dragon, shuffle your library. Not as cool as Dragonstorm and a little bit too black to be red. Fistful of Force is cooler than Grow. I'll get to the multicolored cards and artifacts some other time, along with some tips on taking these ideas you put down and making them into a more awesome set. In the mean time, I thought you might like this article on developing the clash mechanic you seem to enjoy: Mized Doubles by Devin Low. September 21, 2007: Monkeychewtoy predicts monocolored hybrid cards, calls them "Ridiculous."

Thu, 2009-08-20 07:42

monkeychewtoy

Clash of the Titans

Before I begin, I want to say that I like the theme of your set: Titanic forces collide and wake their world. I think, then, that clash is an appropriate keyword to have spread across the colors, because it offers one more way to get across the point that these are powerful, warring forces.

But I'll be honest. The rest of your set is... problematic.

Spoiler:

Heal is by far a worse card than Healing Salve.
Compare Disciple of the Leviathan to Merfolk Looter. No card in the history of Magic has a land searching ability like this one, even assuming the "then shuffle your library" clause. And if a card did, that card would be green.
Compare Frost Drake to Azure Drake, and then notice that [url=http://gatherer.wizards.com/Pages/Search/Default.aspx?text=+[threshold]]all cards with Threshold[/url] reference seven cards, specifically.
While the Panglacial Wurm ability might make more sense in blue than it does in green, but this sort of unrestricted Haakon ability doesn't even make sense in black. It renders almost every kill spell and burn spell useless. Oh, and you forgot a power and toughness.
Leviathan of the Deep is actually a pretty okay card. It reminds of older, major-drawback, Leviathans. Probably one of your best made cards.
Stop is an interesting design, though it's name is too close to silver borders and I have no idea how a Leviathan moves at instant speed. Or why it's looking at the top card of my library, for that matter. Anyway, the idea of a one-mana hard counter is enticing enough to play it even though it will only work maybe a third of the time. Another good one.
Kill is far better than Terror if you win, and a waste of cardboard if you lose. It's also a lame name.
Kizar of the Cave has a proper name but is not legendary. For some reason, he is snow. His mana cost is what they call in the military, "fubar." I'm not going to tell you what that means, but I'll tell you it's not good. For his ability, you should probably be using a template like Azorius Herald has.
The Dark also has a proper name, but is not legendary. Flying and deathtouch don't go well together. Think about it. The entire point of flying is to not hit anything. How do you deathtouch things you're evading?
Compare Dragon Wizard to Lightning Crafter. This wonderful wiz is overpowered.
Dragon's Soul is another one of your good cards. Firebreathing + Flight suggest that this card would be better cost at , but seems okay, although an aura giving flying is a real stretch for red.
Lash Out is probably better than Hit. Actually, Hit is better than Hit.
The Haakon ability makes more sense on Infernal Phoenix, but the Panglacial Wurm ability makes less sense. And the Haakon bit is going to be overpowered no matter what power and toughness you give this.
Keeper of the Forge is kind of cool, but red hates artifacts. It would also make more sense if the Keeper of the Forge was protected from artifacts the way Keeper of Kookus is protected from Kookus.
When you're done with Spirit of the Dragon, shuffle your library. Not as cool as Dragonstorm and a little bit too black to be red.
Fistful of Force is cooler than Grow.

I'll get to the multicolored cards and artifacts some other time, along with some tips on taking these ideas you put down and making them into a more awesome set. In the mean time, I thought you might like this article on developing the clash mechanic you seem to enjoy: Mized Doubles by Devin Low.

September 21, 2007: Monkeychewtoy predicts monocolored hybrid cards, calls them "Ridiculous."

Thu, 2009-08-20 09:19
copapoc	tanks for the constructive tanks for the constructive feedback i see where yoour points are leading and these seem to be beginner mistakes as i closly look over them i will correct where possible and replace if needed i was thinking of the tribal theme of lorowyn but with the greater, stronger and destructive forces of -angels -leviathans -horror's (or zombies) -dragons -beasts since they are already vastly represented amongst all the other sets (exept for playable leviathans) this will give me a hard time designing also i cant make starter creature's with this setting result : i have to involve some races that are "weenies" -soldier -merfolk -zombie -goblin -elf these are actualy just the traditional types used since alpha about the multicolors they will be randomly scatter cards through the set ivolving a series of enemy color enchantments ill update when i'm finished correcting mistakes EDIT: tanks for the link, it's gona help a lot alive and kicking relics of alara

Thu, 2009-08-20 09:19

copapoc

tanks for the constructive

tanks for the constructive feedback
i see where yoour points are leading and these seem to be beginner mistakes as i closly look over them
i will correct where possible and replace if needed

i was thinking of the tribal theme of lorowyn but with the greater, stronger and destructive forces of

-angels
-leviathans
-horror's (or zombies)
-dragons
-beasts

since they are already vastly represented amongst all the other sets (exept for playable leviathans) this will give me a hard time designing

also i cant make starter creature's with this setting
result : i have to involve some races that are "weenies"

-soldier
-merfolk
-zombie
-goblin
-elf

these are actualy just the traditional types used since alpha Stick out your tongue

about the multicolors
they will be randomly scatter cards through the set ivolving a series of enemy color enchantments

ill update when i'm finished correcting mistakes

EDIT: tanks for the link, it's gona help a lot

alive and kicking relics of alara

Tue, 2009-08-25 20:27
copapoc	bump set fyle updated yet bump set fyle updated yet this one still seems to be without the updated clash lands Ö gona import those as fast as possible alive and kicking relics of alara

Sat, 2009-11-07 11:42
Nikeyeia	If you want, i can remake If you want, i can remake the entire set (100 cards). fixing all spelling errors and balancing the set? Currently working on: Unnamed Snow-theme Set

Sat, 2009-11-07 15:17
lord_joakim	... Seriously, you need to ... Seriously, you need to use capitals.

Sat, 2009-11-07 23:13
copapoc	i know -_-' please dont say i know -_-' please dont say capitals one more time ... i had the all fixed and my battery run dry O.O hate it when he does that. anywayz ^^ @ Nikeyeia i would love that yeh ^^ i had given up on this a bit tho. but it would be lovley if it would get some attention. that's mostly wath keeps me going ^^ -grtz cop. alive and kicking relics of alara

Sun, 2009-11-08 13:55
Nikeyeia	Allright i'll upload it Allright i'll upload it right away... Oops. It seems that i did not save it right... Anyways, then im just remaking it all. It doesn't take too much time ^^ EDIT: Im done now. Link here: http://www.mediafire.com/download.php?m4yzzddzzuj I have changed many names/mana costs/power and thoughness. Some of the keywords also have reminder text now. I decided to get rid of skyborn, since only two creatures had it. Currently working on: Unnamed Snow-theme Set

Sun, 2009-11-08 13:55

Nikeyeia

Allright i'll upload it

Allright i'll upload it right away...
Oops. It seems that i did not save it right...
Anyways, then im just remaking it all. It doesn't take too much time ^^

EDIT: Im done now. Link here:
http://www.mediafire.com/download.php?m4yzzddzzuj

I have changed many names/mana costs/power and thoughness. Some of the keywords also have reminder text now.
I decided to get rid of skyborn, since only two creatures had it.

Currently working on: Unnamed Snow-theme Set

Sun, 2009-11-08 16:18
copapoc	DXskyborn ! noooooo.had 2 DX skyborn ! noooooo.had 2 cycles left of ideas ! anywayz ... didn't need to be a keyword though. lets read the over ! i'll maybe add new ones when i'm that far ^^. ooh ! did you add some art ? alive and kicking relics of alara

Sun, 2009-11-08 18:48
Nikeyeia	Yup, i added some art. I Yup, i added some art. I thought of creating tokens for the cards too, but i had some homeworks to do :/ Currently working on: Unnamed Snow-theme Set

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