Not sure about the exact power level, but it's a lot less broken-combo-enabling if you said it's power is equal to the number of mountains plus the number of red permanents you control. I don't think red gets a lot of exile abilities, especially since it just burns things then send them to the graveyard. Destroy would be better for that effect. Finally, I do have to comment on the absurdity of having the option to play an Incarnation of Fire with colorless mana.

I recomend removing the hybrid symbols in exchange for straight up red mana symbols or perhaps a cost of (using the generally accepted conversion factor of one colored mana = ).

so what about
Jizin, Incarnation of Fire 3RRR
Legendary Creature - Immortal Incarnation (M)
2R, Sacrifice a red permanent; or RR, Sacrifice a mountain: Destroy target non-red creature.
Jizin’s power is equal to the number of red permanents + mountians you control.
*/7

I need some balancing advice on this card, and also some wording help on his ability, and its long and clumpy and possibly wrong right now. Thanks in advance for anything you can help me with.

Razor-Leaf Tactician - (rare)
: Return any ammount of creatures to your hand and replace them with any amount of creatures from your hand with a total mana cost thats eqaul to or less than the creatures returned to your hand.
1/3

Not sure about power level, but here's what I'd go with for wording. Also, treating it as an "Creature - Elf Soldier" since you didn't specify type.

Razor-Leaf Tactician 3G
Creature - Elf Soldier (R)
GG, T, Return any number of creatures you control to their owner’s hand: Put any number of creatures with total converted mana cost X onto the battlefield, where X is equal to the total converted mana costs of the returned creatures.
1/3

Its a bit longer, but I think it needs to deal with creatures you control but don't own.

Whoops! My mistake.

I can see where this would be a useful card, but only if you optimize your plays, and don't lose stuff to combat. Seems like things could go wrong pretty easily.

I need some comments on two of my gems:

Infiltrator Commander - rare
Creature - Merfolk
When Infiltrator Commander enters the battlefield, put two 1/1 blue Merfolk creature tokens onto the battlefield.
, Sacrifice a Merfolk: Look at target player’s hand, then draw a card.
2/2

Niv-Mizzet, Planeswalker - mythic rare
Planeswalker - Niv-Mizzet
+2: Target player draws a card and Niv-Mizzet, Planeswalker deals 1 damage to him or her.
-1: Until end of turn, sorcery spells you cast gain Buyback 1.
-7: Niv-Mizzet deals damage to target opponent equal to the number of cards in his or her hand. Draw that many cards.
1

Hello again.
I would like to know, can this card works?

Latiss, I've made your images actual images instead of links to another site. Everyone - I understand your image hosting sites give you a convenient little piece of code to use, but would you just post the image?

I also removed an image - fantasy nudity is still nudity.

Pichoro, Thank you.
About fantasy nudity - I will remove it.

I need help with the wording of this ability:

Mana-Absorb (All sorceries, instants and activated abilities cast/activated by other players target this card if able. Sorceries and Instants do not effect this creature.)

Is this wording passable? Can it be improved?

I need some feedback on power level for a cycle in a set I'm developing:

So, they are a common cycle right now. Are some abilities too good? Obviously some aren't as good as others, but are they underpowered? Do I need to make the "charge" cost more expensive? Should I just make the cycle uncommon?? Something just doesn't seem right to me...

Well, Soul Abacus and Corrosive Abacus are basically slight variations on Marble Chalice and Onyx Goblet, respectively, so I'd say they're fine.

Utopian Abacus is a chargeable Mana Cylix; I'd say that's fine as well for the additional cost.

Mystic Abacus is too powerful, judging by Illuminated Folio or Scepter of Insight. Perhaps 'Draw a card, then discard a card'?

Blood Abacus is also too powerful, judging by Rod of Ruin. Though that can target players too, I'd say it's not a 5-mana difference. Not sure what to do about this one.

What is the point of the tap being seperate if it has no cost.

I would redo them to all be

[cost, I would make it variable to balance the effects better], T: Put a charge counter on ~.
T, remove a charge counter: [effect]

This way you have the option of charging it in a turn, or using it. Seems more dynamic that way, as well as keeping them less abusable.

Right now I can't imagine the rare scenario where you charge it and -don't- tap it right away. Since there is nothing stopping you from doing it that way, you would never pay to charge it unless you were going to use it right away, or you had spare mana at the end of the turn.

to me they all seem overpowered, they might as well have

: Deal X damage to target creature

Target player looses X life

Draw X cards

you gain X life

Gain X mana of any colour

Except its a worse because you can stack it over multiple turns and unleash it all at once.

What i might do is increase their mana costs, make them legendary, or double the cost of placing charges on them.

They don't do that Ragnarokio, you can only unleash them one a turn, unless you have an untap source that is free and reusable...

I think what Ragnarokio is saying is you can put the change counters on them as much as you want. Not unleash them as much as you want.

nevermind, read it completely wrong, sorry. it seems fine.

I need some help with these cards, mostly balancing.

Ragnarokio you didn't credit any of your art.

Thanks kiligr for your help, really appreciated

And to Shiv, pretty much all the artwork there are widespread images used all over the internet with no known author, so i don't know who i would credit, in many cases the art was probably submitted under "anonymous" Pichoro can remove the images if its still not allowed.

Brave Lion

1. Infiltrator Commander is an interesting near-parody of Siege-Gang Commander. From a numbers standpoint, Peek and Shock are pretty much equal. I like, too, that rather than using Goblins as grenades, I get to use Merfolk like the Bothans from Star Wars: Many Vodalians died to bring us this information. The only note I would make is that it's much easier to supply the Siege-Ganger with Goblins than it is to supply the Infiltrator with Merfolk. Also, may I suggest changing the name to "Espionage Commander"?
2. Niv-Mizzet, Planeswalker is, at , half the Dragon he used to be. Compared to his old self, he just doesn't line up the way Nicol Bolas and Nicol Bolas, Planeswalker do.

   I have more detailed ideas for him, if you're interested. For now, just try making him bigger and cooler.

1. Name of the Blanking Things Cycle
   Some notes on the cycle as a whole:
   1. All of them are colorless. Without text specifying their color, like the Pact cycle from Future Sight, that little in the corner means that they're only as colorful as Herbal Poultice. I'd suggest just making them cost a single mana of their respective colors. It saves lines in the text box, and it's still fun to talk about, say, "a 4/4 for ." In fact, it might even be splashier.
   2. This cycle doesn't seem as tight as it wants to be. Some of them exile ally-colored permanents. Some exile enemy-colored permanents. I suggest that they consistently exile ally-colored permanents to emphasize ally interactions and similarities. So white should exile blue, blue should black, black should red, red should green, and green should white.
   3. Besides that, they probably shouldn't exile. Sacrifice is a fairly traditional cost, especially if limited to creatures, and makes them more interactive with Thraximundar, Dragon Appeasement, and good old Raise Dead effects.
   4. The abilities should sync up with the color overlap, and be less similar to each other. To many +1/+1 counters spoil the broth, as they say.
   5. I don't understand the tribal lines. They don't look like Merfolk or Goblins, and nothing in their text really references them. Either make them more interactive with their tribes, (and change their art to reflect their new identities,) or leave them as just plain Spirits.
   Spoiler:

   1. Etihew of the Bright Skies
      Legendary Creature - Spirit (M)
      As an additional cost to play Etihew of the Bright Skies, sacrifice three blue creatures.
      Flying
      , Sacrifice a blue creature: Put a feather counter on target creature. That creature is a 3/1 Bird and has flying as long as it has a feather counter on it.
      6/2
      1. Templating fixed, and ability strengthened to match Aven Mimeomancer. Power and toughness switched to make it more enticing, and to make it a double-sized version of the bird it makes. If I'm going to lose three permanents, it had darned well better be worth it!
   2. Eluba of the Dousing Waves
      Legendary Creature - Spirit (M)
      As an additional cost to play Eluba of the Dousing Waves, sacrifice three black creatures.
      Sacrifice a black creature: Put a flood counter on Eluba.
      , Remove a flood counter from Eluba: Return target creature to its owner's hand, then draw card.
      5/3
      1. Ability changed to match Repulse, an iconic blue card. Power and toughness changed to 5/3 so it has the same sum as Etihew's power and toughness.
   3. Kalbos of the Corrupting Fumes
      Legendary Creature - Spirit (M)
      As an additional cost to play Kalbos of the Corrupting Fumes, sacrifice three red creatures.
      , Sacrifice a red creature: Put a 1/1 black Zombie creature token onto the battlefield with ": Regenerate this creature."
      4/4
      1. Ability makes the same tokens as Skeletonize, instead of a strange mash-up between this guy and these guys.
   4. Derrod of the Burning Flames
      Legendary Creature - Spirit (M)
      As an additional cost to play Derrod of the Burning Flames, sacrifice three green creatures.
      Sacrifice a green creature: Put two +1/+1 counters on Derrod.
      : If Derrod is on the battlefield, it deals damage equal to its power to target creature. That creature deals damage equal to its power to Derrod.
      7/1
      1. Ability now lies somewhere between Magus of the Arena and Durkwood Tracker. Power and toughness add up to eight, and encourage you to feed him a couple times before tapping him.
   5. Neergren of the Grappling Vines
      Legendary Creature - Spirit (M)
      As an additional cost to play Neergren of the Grappling Vines, sacrifice three white creatures.
      Defender, reach
      Neergren can block any number of creatures.
      , Sacrifice a white creature: Put three +1/+1 counters on Neergren. You gain 3 life.
      1/7
      1. Made a 1/7 so it has at least some power. Added lifegain so that it's a little more interesting.

1. Mana Twist works within the rules, and you found some wonderful art! The wording should be, "Empty your mana pool. Then for each mana emptied this way, add one mana of any color to your mana pool."
2. Shroud of Refuge uses 6-sided dice, which are not supported by the rules. I'd suggest something that, while still random, is possibly useful and more manipulable.
   1. Enchant permanent
      Enchanted permanent is indestructible.
      At the beginning of your upkeep, reveal the top card of your library. If the revealed card is a land, sacrifice Shroud of Refuge.
3. Augury works and is a cool concept. It just needs wording fixed.
   1. When Augery enters the battlefield, scry 3.
      Whenever you draw a card, you may exile Augury. If you do, return it to the battlefield at the beginning of your next upkeep.

1. Convergence (Whenever a spell or ability an opponent controls is put onto the stack, if that spell or ability could target a permanent with convergence on the battlefield but doesn't, that opponent changes one of its targets to a permanent with convergence.)

Vinyacoire - Apart from the blue one, I can't see anything wrong with any of these. Yes the red one is efficient, but doesn't really win you the game (would be a bomb in limited though). How about the blue one gives a creature -?/-0 until end of turn? It seems the most balanced option. Even card filtering seems overly strong for the cost.

My first thought was that they will be an efficient way to gain charge counters (to be used with other cards), but even so I can't see it being broken.

_Ragnarokio_
I have to say, the art actually put me off reading these. Text is much easier to look at unless it's really good art. I would also point out that using "anonymous" images doesn't mean that you have any more right to use them uncredited.

Mana Twist's is kind of weird and could be simplified by making it cost with "Add X mana in any combination of colors to your mana pool." Probably shouldn't be a rare, either. Other utility cards like that are usually common. Maybe an uncommon.

I think it would be more fun at common like this.

Mana Twist
Instant (C) or (U)
Empty your mana pool. Then add X mana of any one color to your mana pool. Where X is the amount of mana emptied this way.

The wording a bit messy but I tired and don't really feel like putting a lot of work in to it right now.

I made a cycle of enemy color hosers which trouble me.

Order of the Maroon Slayer

Creature - Human Knight
First strike
Prevent all noncombat damage dealt to CARDNAME.
When a spell or ability an opponent controls causes you to discard CARDNAME, return it to your hand.
3/3

Freezer of the Yellow Soil

Creature - Vedalken Wizard
Flying
Prevent all noncombat damage dealt to CARDNAME.
Nonland cards can’t add mana to your opponents’ mana pools.
2/2

Bane of the Celadon Souls

Creature - Zombie Rogue
Lifelink
Damage dealt by CARDNAME can’t be prevented.
Nonland cards can’t add mana to your opponents’ mana pools.
3/2

Annihilator of the Lavender Thoughts

Creature - Goblin Warrior
Haste
Damage dealt by CARDNAME can’t be prevented.
CARDNAME can’t be countered.
4/1

Foiler of the Lapis Plans

Creature- Elf Druid
Flash
CARDNAME can’t be countered.
When a spell or ability an opponent controls causes you to discard CARDNAME, return it to your hand.
4/4

Among tinier things my biggest concern is the anti-green ability found on the freezer and bane. While all the other things affect the creature it is on the green one doesn't work and could be too good? I have no better idea how to replace it with something that feels smoother and in tune with the rest.

Need wording help

~ gets +1/+1 for every other creatures with the name ~ on your side of the battlefield

Does it work,or should it be written in some other way

~ gets +1/+1 for each other creature on the you control named ~.
from Relentless Rats

not sure if that's a typo shiv or what but it should be

~ gets +1/+1 for each other creature you control named ~.

Ops.
Yeah it's a typo copied and pasted form Relentless Rats.

Let me know what you all think about attempt number two (really three or four) at the Abacus Cycle:

i don't think you would need a mana cost for the charge, i just don't understand why anyone would build up multiple charges. Having 1 is pretty much just as effective as having 10 from what i can see.

Regarding your Abaci, Vinyacoire, having the first ability tap is definitely the way to go. If you just made it cost mana you could theoretically put any unfixed amount of counters on it but at the same time just get one shot at a time from the second which doesn't make sense on the card as a whole (assuming that if one gets a mana activation the other gets to tap as a cost otherwise it could be too good). Now for the second line yes you could just make it tap too. On the first impression you get to make the tough decision to charge it or to use it.

But this setup would just lead to charging-using-charging-using-etc. You will never get any benefit from charging it multiple times because you will always just use it once a turn under normal circumstances unless there are untap shenanigans. Well, actually there is a marginal advantage in charging it twice: You can use it twice in a row!...... *sigh*

Therefore, to implement a real "choice" on the card I suggest having the second line a cost of one generic mana and a colored mana rather than tapping. This way you provide an incentive to tap it multiple turns in a row and unleash it for a big effect later. And no, even if this proposal seems bad from a Spike's perspective, remember that cards are not exclusively designed for him. With an activation cost of two mana the green one should generate 3 green mana infinite mana! or two of any color.

The problem with how they are currently is that since you can basically only use them every other turn, they're underpowered, as similar effects (Marble Chalice) allow a once-a-turn use.

Not sure if this would be balanced, or what you're looking for, or not, but what about:

Soul Abacus -
Artifact
, : Put X charge counters on Soul Abacus.
, , Remove X charge counters from Soul Abacus: Gain X life.

If that makes sense? Of course, it could be altered from that to make it more balanced... And/or have the second ability changed to Y, if needed... Not sure if I have the hang yet of how exactly the variables work.

I'd add another mana cost to the second ability. The fact that it's as easy to gain massive amounts of life as it is to set it up makes it pretty bad, especially in Elf decks featuring Wellwisher or Orzhov decks.

Maybe W or WW, so that it isn't exactly a 1:1 ratio.

Now, I'm looking for a way to word this one properly:
==
Arcane Reshaping
Instant
XU

Counter target spell with converted mana cost X. Its owner may play another spell with the same converted mana cost from his hand. (X is 0.)
==
I used "play" because the spell isn't being paid for (hence the "X is 0" language), but am still uncertain.

Thanks for the Marble Chalice reference, HudsonWolf; I had been trying to find a newer Artifact that gained you 1 life per tap, and all I could find was the old Fountain of Youth...

I also do not mind your suggestion at all. In fact, it seems to fit rather nicely. Thanks again.

Brave Lion
The cycle seems all around very powerful a 2CC. Compare to the Barrenton Cragtreads cycle from Shadowmoor. Even at uncommon, this cycle is a little nuts. I would suggest first and foremost that you drop the evergreen keywords and equalize their power and toughness. 2/2, perhaps. 3/3 would make them way better than the Cragtreads, but maybe not better than Serra Angel. So I don't know how I'd swing that.
And the green hose does seem really off. Perhaps Uncle Istvan has an idea for us? I'd soften it a bit, though, so that the critter doesn't turn into Cho-Manno, Revolutionary. Perhaps, "Prevent all combat damage that would be dealt to CARDNAME by nonartifact creatures." There are only two green artifact creatures. (There is a third red one.)
On to the hoses, then:

1. : Damage dealt by CARDNAME can't be prevented. (Excruciator)
2. : CARDNAME can't be countered. (Scragnoth)
3. : When a spell or ability an opponent controls causes you to discard CARDNAME, return it to your hand. (Quagnoth)
4. : Prevent all noncombat damage that would be dealt to CARDNAME. (Mark of Asylum)
5. : Prevent all combat damage that would be dealt to CARDNAME by nonartifact creatures. (Something like Uncle Istvan)

1. Arcane Reshaping
   Instant (U)
   Counter target spell. That spell's controller may reveal a nonland card from his or her hand with the same converted mana cost as the countered spell. If he or she does, that player may cast the revealed card without paying its mana cost.

Should also include "If a spell is countered this way."

Ah, I missed that. Thanks. So the updated version should say this:
"Counter target spell with converted mana cost X. That spell's controller may cast a spell with converted mana cost X without paying its mana cost."
And my version should say this:
"Counter target spell. If that spell was countered this way, its controller may reveal a nonland card from his or her hand with the same converted mana cost as the countered spell. If he or she does, that player may cast the revealed card without paying its mana cost."

Although, while Faerie Trickery and Remand say we need that phrase, Dream Fracture and Spellshift say we don't. I suppose it depends on whether or not you want your opponent to get the bonus even if he keeps his first spell. Or abuse it for yourself. For example, you can Spellshift your own Volcanic Fallout and reveal into a Pyroclasm to get hit every creature for 4 damage. And you can Dream Fracture your own Great Sable Stag to draw two cards and still get your Elk.

It depends on how you want it to roll. I think I actually prefer the Spellshift and Dream Fracture style, myself. I leave that decision--as well as which version of Arcane Reshaping to use--up to you, Jéské Couriano.

No, Monkey, the alternate wording isn't what I'm intending. I don't want to make the card too complex; it's currently at Uncommon and staying that way. No reveal clauses, and even with the clause there it's too powerful for its cost.

I did take your original rewording, and added Rusty Keyes' amendment, since I don't want the victim getting two spells at once.

The more I think about it, the more I begin to think the reveal clause is either necessary in both versions or unnecessary in either version. I'm not sure which, yet. I might poke around on the Gatherer and let you know what I find out.

Yeah, nobody should be getting two spells for . Good choice, Jeske.

I think the reason the former two have it is because they actually do something to the spell beyond countering it, where things would get weird when the spell can't be countered but still gets returned. Yes, Dovescape violates this and yes, I think it's very wrong to do so.

Try not to focus on the weirdness of getting a Volcanic Fallout and a Vampire Aristocrat for . Remember that my version will usually just counter a spell for . (Which yeah, may be unfair. Probably would be better.)
The version is at best a Spell Blast, and gets markedly worse if your opponent has two spells with the same converted mana cost. I can't think of a good way to make it anything but worse than Spell Blast. I think that's a shame, since Spell Burst shows us that there's room for improvement. Maybe just making it a cantrip will negate its drawback. I'm not sure.

There's also no way to word this spell without it sounding like, "Mana cost, mana cost, mana cost." If nothing else, the reveal clause in my version put some space between instances of the phrase 'mana cost.'

@ monkeychewtoy

My enemy color hosers cycle looks overpowered in comparison to the common Shadowmoor cycle you mentioned but tame in comparison to Baneslayer Angel which is some sort of black/red hoser too. I never had any intention but putting them on rare anything else is out of question with their p/t to cmc ration and the number of abilities in addition. These cards are obviously designed for Spike.

The evergreens I feel add something, an icing on the cake if you will that makes them an even bigger obstacle for the opposition ("can't kill me with burn and in creature combat I get to strike first!" "You like to get sneaky and never tap out? I come in an instant....")The keyword abilities also showcase what the enemy colors do not like as for example a haster vs traditional control colors and so on.

Base p/t makes the cycle more uninteresting if anything. A four power haster is more impressive than a two power one and all the p/t combinations help displaying the keyword ability and at the same time the creature quality in each color. The green one has to be over the top especially with Great Sable Stag in mind which raised the bar quite a foot and some inches.

Your suggestion for the green hoser doesn't work at all: The reasoning that green is the color centered around creatures leads to a fallacy when drawing your conclusion. It hoses every other color almost equally hard and is way better than all the other four hoser abilities. There you see how hard it is to come up with something that green almost exclusively does without treading into other colors' territory.

As for their power level once again I think that each color has answers for each hoser. The knight can be destroyed by kill spells, -X/-X spells and other creatures with first strike. The wizard can be blocked by spiders and alike and outraced by smaller creatures. The zombie in its current state under the premise that the anti-green line must be redone has almost no hoser qualities at all. The goblin can be bounced, blocked by a token (hey this ain't Giant Solifuge!), rfged. The elf is merely better than the Stag before you play it/in you hand, on the battlefield is has no protection at all!

I like the cycle because it prevents the enemy colors from using their traditional trademark tools and forces them to adapt a bit to the current situtation.

Hey guys, I'm back with another cycle for my post Ravnica block. Because the main focus of the set is tri-colored groups instead of the two-colored guilds, I'm featuring hybrid as a larger portion of the set. This is a cycle of Nephilim developed by Monkeychewtoy and I, and I'd like to gather some comments concerning how balanced they are.

Brave Lion
I'll be honest. I think that cycle would be dumb as rares. As Tom LaPille [url=]writes[/url], "color hosers are easy places to go when a player is looking for answers to problems." Players can't easily go there if the cards are at rare. Baneslayer Angel wasn't designed to be a hoser for . It was designed to be a righteous Angel.
Let me say my opinion separately from my clinical advice so that the two don't confuse each other. It is my opinion that the cycle belongs at uncommon, that their power and toughness should be uniform, (like the "can't be blocked" and Outlander cycles,) and that the evergreen abilities add unnecessary complication that makes it more difficult for the cards to fulfill their intended purpose. That is, the complication means they need to be rares, and this makes it more difficult for them to help players do any hosing, because they can't get the cards when they need them.
Now then, on to the clinical bit. The green hose I came up with--you're right--is too broad for what you want. I'm still somewhat at a loss to find a way to hose the 'creature color' without hosing everyone else, too. My next thought is that blue and black do enjoy a little bit of overlap in Ovinize and Sudden Spoiling, (as well as Serendib Sorceror and Sorceress Queen,) that punishes people for playing big creatures. Perhaps something can be done with that? I'm really not sure.
And don't think that I'm dismissing your reasons for liking the cycle! Your reasons are very much valid, and you have every right to not change a thing.

I must say, I love that artwork for Rhull (and it's even titled "The Seer"!). I can completely see Rhull wearing a golden mask like that, since he's not too popular among Kruic's common population in the set. I also like the change to his -1 ability from Merfolk Looter.

I can see your point for the Neph, I'll re-arrange their abilities. I'm still open to comments on the individual abilities.

Does anyone here have ideas for a Jhoira planeswalker? Sure, artifacts is the way to go but since Tezzeret already represents an artifact focused walker I don't want to make another artifact-only walker. I haven't read any Magic novels so I cannot tell what she excelled other than this in the storyline. Also, with Jhoira being done as a creature in the Time Spiral setting I want to make her more related to her time in Tolaria.

Take the route of her Vanguard Avatar from Magic Online, and focus on spells and instants. She has an entire format dedicated to her Avatar - Jhoira Basic.

Hello.
I would like to know. Is Remedy ability balanced -
Remedy - <action> (If this spell is countered, <action>)
Examples:
Natural Bloom