Card of the Week Contest #191: Greatness Beyond Words

Mon, 2017-10-23 12:45
Daij_Djan
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Welcome to the Card of the Week Contest! To participate in this Contest you'll have to design a card along the contest guidelines and throw it into the arena with other competitors' entries! At the end of each week, a winner will be determined by forum poll. The winner's card will be rendered and featured on the Welcome page, and the winner decides the challenge for the next week's Contest!

Here we go, competitors: our hundred and ninety-first challenge!


The winner of the "Magic... Who?" poll was Scribbl with...

And the challenge issued by our winner was...

Scribbl wrote:
For some legends of the Multiverse, their greatness is far beyond any spoken words. Their power is evident by their stature, and the way they inspire morale in allies and fear in enemies. Some legends with such majesty include Avacyn, Angel of Hope, Griselbrand, Keiga, the Tide Star, and Urabrask the Hidden. For this challenge, come up with a legend whose greatness is beyond words. Design a legendary creature card with no more than 15 words in its text box! (Reminder text and flavour text don't count towards your word limit, and remember that flavour text is a great way to bolster your champion's grandeur!)

To increase your chances of winning and to also make creating the poll easier on whomever is doing so, please try to use a render.
Additionally, please try to keep your entry edits all in one post - if you need to change it you can put your old entry in a spoiler marked "Old entry" and leave the newest rendition to be seen. Just use the edit button in the bottom/right of your original post.

And now, time to begin the challenge!

Best of luck, competitors!

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Mon, 2017-10-23 14:05
ColinBeck
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Revinne, Rift-Touched 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Legendary Creature- Human Wizard Warrior
Vanishing 3
Each player skips each of his or her main phases.
4/4
By leading her raids through the temporal rifts themselves, Revinne's enemies have not a single moment to catch their breath.

I'm wearing my optimistic trousers today!

Mon, 2017-10-23 18:02
Mahx Michael
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His greatness is beyond words... and numbers...

(not an entry)

Mon, 2017-10-23 15:38
Asthanius
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Do symbols count towards the word limit? For example, does Tap symbol count as a word?

Mon, 2017-10-23 15:59
Pixi-Rex
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Entry

This is one of the better designs from me in a long time i feel. Im super happy with this. A happy smile
I would like it to be 3 mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbol Maybe i should take 1 toughness point off. Im not sure, if its balanced perfect out. Please let me know.

Thu, 2017-10-26 17:56
Mahx Michael
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@Asthanius
Check if your MSE counts them as words. MSE has a function for word count in the statistics window.
Aparently, MSE counts symbols as words. I would not.


Entry wrote:
Lavinia, Stalwart Deputy 3 mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Human Soldier Mythic Rare
Protection from red
Whenever you would scry, draw that many cards instead.

Once, a feared enforcer of the law. Now, spending hours taking care of the Guildpact’s paperwork...
4/4

Render

My naming skills are terrible. If someone can help me find a better title for her (other than Master Secretary), I will unfortunately not give you a cookie, since that's already trademarked, but I might give you something else A happy smile I'll make you a legend or something...
EDIT: Quazer Flame got it.

Mon, 2017-10-23 16:39
fluffyDeathbringer
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Remind yourself that overconfidence is a slow and insidious killer.

Avatar by rickenfe13. goats are gay

Fri, 2017-10-27 13:21
Gateways7

I'll just post a text version now, but I'll make a render later today or tommorow.

Khalla Actem, the Fearbringer 3 mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbol

Creature - Horror

Shroud

This creature can't be sacrificed.

Creatures can't block.

Life totals can't go below 1.

5/4

The flavor for it is, for the first ability, that creatures are too scared to block other ones, and for the second, that the fear of death is worse than death itself. The embodiment of fear itself is beyond spoken words, and it's pretty majestic.

EDIT: Added card type, subtype, and shroud to prevent sacrificing shenanigans for insta-wins.
EDIT AGAIN: Ok now the preventing sacrificing shenanigans actually works! I think. Also the card uses exactly 15 words, which is fun.

Mon, 2017-10-23 18:07
Mahx Michael
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@Gateways7
What is your entry's card types and subtypes?

Mon, 2017-10-23 17:44
BurningCreator
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New Thalia. And with a new hate ability inspired by Torpor Orb.

Mon, 2017-10-23 18:44
Malsey
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I forget how to eat sometimes and I lay in bed dying and making MSE sets.
neighbor
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Mon, 2017-10-23 18:58
Angelus_Reprobi
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Awn, I thought Daij_Djan or theHuw would win my challenge, they were so good and flavorful. A sad 'frowny'

Joel Timestalker [Blue mana symbolRed mana symbol]
Legendary Creature - Human Wizard Rare
Flash
Each player can cast noncreature spells only during his or her opponent's turns.
2/2

Mon, 2017-10-23 19:13
thehuw
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From one "The" straight into another, here's one of my proudest achievements from 27 Shades of Villainy. I don't recall what the rules are for using existing cards from other projects; I think I've seen people do it before, but I'm sure a friendly mod will come poke me if I'm wrong and I'll happily design something else.

The Iron Sheriff 5 mana symbol
Legendary Artifact Creature - Construct Mythic Rare
Each spell costs 1 mana symbol more to cast for each of its colors.
"We gave her one directive: protect our lands. Trouble is, we never told her who to protect them from."
- Dav, engineer of Neo-Albion

4/4

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Set Huwb
They/them pronouns, please.
Praise Vectron.

Wed, 2017-10-25 07:31
spazlaz

old

This doesn't affect deck building.

Mon, 2017-10-23 19:40
Tarvoc
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A design I did before Shadows over Innistrad was released, for a Colorshifted set I never actually finished.

Avacyn

My colors: Freedom (Red mana symbol) through Knowledge (Blue mana symbol) and Organization (White mana symbol).

Thu, 2017-10-26 17:30
sdfkjgh
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OLD

Colin "Bomber" Harris 1 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Legendary Creature--Human Warrior Rare
Haste
1 mana symbolRed/green mana symbol, Tap symbol: Target creature fights itself.
1/3

Thanks to Daij_Djan & Mahx Michael, I made the following change:

Colin "Bomber" Harris 1 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Legendary Creature--Human Warrior Rare
Haste
3 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol, Tap symbol: Target creature fights itself.
1/3

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Tue, 2017-10-24 14:54
Asthanius
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That Which Blooms Colorless mana symbolColorless mana symbolColorless mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Eldrazi Mythic Rare
Tap symbol: Add three mana in any combination of types to your mana pool.
Found in the aftermath, motionless in the wastes, it greeted its discoverers with a low hum and granted visions of new worlds. For days, they stood in silence and listened.
3/4

Mon, 2017-10-23 20:21
Quazer Flame

@Mahx Michael
How about naming her "Lavina, Stalwart Deputy"?

Still working on my own submission and cookie quest Big smile

Mon, 2017-10-23 20:33
Aarhg
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It's nearly impossible for me to design a legendary creature without thinking about how the card would work as a commander in EDH. This one has potential for some neat political interactions.

Jexa Willstealer 1 mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Human Wizard Rare
1 mana symbolBlue/red mana symbolBlue/red mana symbol: Exchange the power of Jexa Willstealer and another target creature until end of turn.
She wrings souls for the sweet nectar that is determination. And just as any commodity, this nectar can be acquired for the right price.
0/5

Mon, 2017-10-23 21:50
Mahx Michael
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@Quazer Flame
Thanks a lot!
I have no idea what you look like, so do you have any art you want me to use in your representation? If not, I'll probably use this one, or maybe this one.

Mon, 2017-10-23 21:58
Quazer Flame

@Mahx Michael I love the first one with the wolf! That one!

No longer an entry:

I had to make this image practically from scratch instead of using MSE.

Cookie for whoever makes another card based on this one! (Specifically lands that have to be cast instead of played.)

Mon, 2017-10-23 22:53
Mahx Michael
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Congratulations Quazer! Now you're a legend!

(not an entry)

Does the gold borders look ok, or should I make them silver or black borders instead?
My next template is probably going to be beautiful silver borders...

Mon, 2017-10-23 21:49
Daij_Djan
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@Angelus_Reprobi: Glad you liked my entry Winking smiley

@Quazer Flame: Lands cannot be cast and even if you grant costs to one, you don't have to pay them - the Comprehensive Rules are pretty strict on this.. So if you'd want to change this, it would need to be rules text rather than ability text.

@sdfkjgh: Kiku, Night's Flower says your card is really undercosted..

@all: Poll will be up in ~10 minutes A happy smile

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Wed, 2017-10-25 13:30
Quazer Flame

@Mahx Michael
I like it Big smile Might I suggest a few changes?

Quazer Flame, Cookie Dealer
Legendary Creature - Wolf Angel
Quazer Flame's power and toughness are each equal to the number of Cookies on the battlefield plus 1.
White mana symbolWhite mana symbol, Tap symbol: Create a colorless Cookie artifact token. Target opponent gains control of it.
*+1/*+1

My cookies are silver border, so I feel this card should also be silver border.
Fixed grammar on ability, as well as made sure the card doesn't die immediately on entering a battlefield without any cookies.
Changed activated ability slightly for flavor Big smile
The picture shows a wolf angel, I've commissioned a few wolf angel pics, so Wolf Angel feels appropriate.

I hope I haven't taken over your idea too much.

@Daij_Djan
Dang it. Oh well, I'll look for a fix or a new entry.

EDIT:

EDIT: No longer an entry:

New supertype: Spell
Spell is a supertype that goes on land cards. Spell lands have mana costs and are cast as spells instead of played like lands. They use the Nyx border from the Theros block as an additional identifier. While a spell land is on the stack, it can be countered like any other spell. Once a spell land resolves, it is put onto the battlefield.
(I am aware of the possible confusion and am looking for a better word than "spell")

Two cookies up for grabs. Like my last post, one if for making another spell land. The second cookie is for whoever helps me come up with a better word for this new supertype!

EDIT: And this is getting scrapped, I was trying to be too clever.

Tue, 2017-10-24 17:56
kinotherapy
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This is a wonderful name for a challenge

Draxlesh, Lava Revenant 2 mana symbolBlack mana symbolRed mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Demon Spirit
You can’t play lands.
Pay 2 life, Discard a land card: Draw a card.
He partakes in no carnage of his own, instead roaming burning worlds to contract those who would trade creation for destruction.
6/6

Quazer Flame wrote:
The second cookie is for whoever helps me come up with a better word for this new supertype!

Nonland.

Legendary Nonland Land Creature.

Mon, 2017-10-23 22:35
Quazer Flame

@kinotherapy
Heh. That introduces all sorts of confusion

Mon, 2017-10-23 22:44
Daij_Djan
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OK, here's my own entry - still sad to this day I didn't end up having room to use this artwork for PoA:

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Mon, 2017-10-23 22:44
Ziolang
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I was lacking in ideas this week


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Mon, 2017-10-23 22:55
Mahx Michael
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@Quazer Flame
True, you just identified it, so it's no longer unidentified...
As for the 1+*/1+*: It doesn't work very well with the M15 template, so I just made it a 1/1 with +*/+* instead.
Even though my card doesn't work the exact same way as un-cards, I just googled gold borders and found out their not even playable in any format, so until I find my own uniqe color, I guess I'll use silver borders...

Replaced the old card with the new one.



@Quazer Flame
As for supertype; what about Landspell??

The normal way to do it is to have a rules text that says "Whenever ~ enters the battlefield, sacrifice it unless it's controller pays <cost>.", or to just make it a creature spell that becomes a land in adittion to it's other types when it enters the battlefield.

Mon, 2017-10-23 22:48
ThisisSakon
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Mon, 2017-10-23 23:08
Mahx Michael
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If someone can help me find some good Lavinia art I can use for my entry render, I would really apriciate it! It might even make you a legend Winking smiley

@ThisisSakon
Nice card! Might make a pretty good commander!

Mon, 2017-10-23 23:51
Inverness
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I'm not sure this would ever see print, but it's about as impactful as I can think of.

Tue, 2017-10-24 03:41
Asthanius
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@Quazer: I still don't understand why it's a land in the first place. Lands don't inherently tap for mana, and it would still have summoning sickness because it's a creature, so there's no reason not to just make it a creature. The only reason Dryad Arbor exists is because Future Sight was intentionally strange and experimental.

Tue, 2017-10-24 14:31
sdfkjgh
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@Asthanius: There's already a template for what you're trying to do: "Add three mana in any combination of types to your mana pool." Unless you're going for three mana in any combination of colors, plus an additional Colorless mana symbol, which would have to be written out as "Add three mana in any combination of colors to your mana pool, then add an additional Colorless mana symbol to your mana pool."

@Daij: What mana cost would you suggest?

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Tue, 2017-10-24 14:41
Pixi-Rex
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@sdfkjgh: I should never had clicked your link. It resulted me on youtube watching 1 hour of Monty Python clips. A happy smile

Tue, 2017-10-24 20:44
sdfkjgh
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@Pixi: Muahahahaa, my evil plan worked!

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Sun, 2017-10-29 19:57
Wapulatus
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Pruflas, Rakdos Bloodjester 1 mana symbolBlack mana symbolRed mana symbol

Legendary Creature - Imp Rare

Unleash (You may have this creature enter the battlefield with a +1/+1 counter on it. It can't block as long as it has a +1/+1 counter on it.)

Creatures attack each turn if able.

"It's all fun and games until... well, it's still fun and games after someone gets hurt."

2/1

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Render

Fri, 2017-10-27 20:31
Mocandragon5
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So, this may seem like an odd counter to use, but it is the most elegant way to implement the idea of damage never being removed.

Text Version
The Thousand-Scarred 4 mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Avatar Mythic Rare
Damage is dealt to creatures in the form of -0/-1 counters.
Their story forgotten, their brutality remembered forever.
5/5

Wed, 2017-10-25 07:31
spazlaz

This idea has a little more to it:

You can play lands from:

exile
hands
graveyards
command zone

Notice you can play lands from your opponent's hand if you have telepathy!

Comments are welcome!

Thu, 2017-10-26 00:14
Quazer Flame

New Entry:

I'm just going to stop trying to be clever and just make a card that doesn't push the boundaries of design plausibility...

EDIT: Fixed grammar and included forgotten artist credit

Wed, 2017-10-25 13:57
Mahx Michael
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@Quazer Flame
Yeah, that might help. Because for Magic to just abandon how they treat a supertype isn't that much likely. Like for example making planeswalkers legendary and then totally abandon the planeswalker uniqueness rule and treat them like ordinary legendary permanents... Oh, wait. They just did that


So, should I make any changes to my entry? Like making it mono-blue, changing it's class type to "Advisor" maybe, or maybe another type like Secretary?
The current version has just taken the original Lavinia and changed her main ability, so do you reccomend I do some more changes?
If someone runs into some fitting art to my render, I would also love some help with that. It's really difficult to find art related to Magic-unique creature, if you except the most famous ones, so if anyone finds something that might resemble Lavinia, I would be really greatful if you tell me A happy smile

Wed, 2017-10-25 14:32
Ziolang
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@Quazer Flame: see the Archetype of Endurance wording.


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Wed, 2017-10-25 15:01
Touhoufanatic
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this might be insanity, but i think it may work.
thoughts?

render

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My colors

Mon, 2017-10-30 17:00
Korakhos
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This challenge was surprisingly harder than I originally thought, here's my entry, not sure about the P/T balance.

Old

Wed, 2017-10-25 17:27
Daij_Djan
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@sdfkjgh: Initial question: A creature fighting itself deals damage equal to twice its power to itself - is that what you intended?

@spazlaz: Wording nitpick: ..from all zones.. Also this won't work with hands, no - unless you add "..or revealed.." as well.

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Wed, 2017-10-25 17:33
Mahx Michael
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@Gateways7

Gateways wrote:
EDIT: Added card type, subtype, and shroud to prevent sacrificing shenanigans for insta-wins.
Thanks! A happy smile And well, sacrifice doesn't use target, so you can still sacrifice Shananigans to pay costs. But yes, you cannot use one-target removals on it...

Wed, 2017-10-25 18:41
sdfkjgh
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@Daij: That's precisely correct.

@spazlaz: Very nice vocabulary word.

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Wed, 2017-10-25 19:06
Aarhg
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Does anyone have some thoughts on my design? It's a little weird, so I'm finding it hard to judge the power level.

Wed, 2017-10-25 21:18
Mahx Michael
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@Aarhg
If you mean power level as in the creaetures power, I think 0 should be fine. But if you mean power level as in how powerful a card it is, I think your attention should go to the mana cost. Serene Master has a similar ability, but cannot activate it at will like your's can. It is also a two mana spell, but it's pt is 0/2. So it is probably all depending on the activation cost of your card's ability. Either way, it's a great concept you've made.

@sdfkjgh
Then find the card that deals damage to target creature equal to that creature's power and mulitply its cost with 1.5 and round it up if its not a whole number.
Kiku, Night's Flower is a creature with this as an activated ability. If you use that as reference, you get Creature cost: Red mana symbolGreen mana symbol, Ability cost: 4 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol, Tap symbol or something...

@Korakhos
The P/T of your creature isn't that unbalanced. In my opinion, you could even increase it. Your mana cost has a CMC of 8 as well as a color weight of 4. That's a heavy cost, Avacyn, Angel of Hope is 5 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol and has pt 8/8.

Wed, 2017-10-25 23:35
sdfkjgh
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@Mahx: How about splitting the difference a bit to 1 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol mana cost & 3 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol, Tap symbol activation cost?

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Thu, 2017-10-26 11:35
Mahx Michael
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@sdfkjgh
That might work too, maybe, but I'm not 100% sure. What about setting Ability Cost to 3 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol, Tap symbol and Creature cost to 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol to be on the safe side?


Added render and flavor text to my entry.
I don't know if the flavor text is good enough, or if it's just stupid and maybe the card would be better without it? Also, I kinda want to make it mono-blue, but I'm not sure if I can. Does the protection ability very white, or does her background as a central Azourious member still require her to be White mana symbolBlue mana symbol? I would really like if someone could tell me!

Also, the art is obviously not of Lavinia, but finding art of her that is not the original art for Lavinia of the Tenth or a remake of it proves to be very difficult! One interesting matter though, is the fact that it's the same artist that made this art as the one who made the art for Lavinia of the Tenth!