Card of the Week Contest #184: Juzám Djinn's Descendants

Mon, 2017-09-04 17:09
Daij_Djan
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Welcome to the Card of the Week Contest! To participate in this Contest you'll have to design a card along the contest guidelines and throw it into the arena with other competitors' entries! At the end of each week, a winner will be determined by forum poll. The winner's card will be rendered and featured on the Welcome page, and the winner decides the challenge for the next week's Contest!

Here we go, competitors: our hundred and eighty-forth challenge!


The winner of the "Is it a bird? Is it a plane? No, it's a Magic card!" poll were Aarhg (left) and marioware2 (right) with...

And the challenge issued by one of our runner-ups was...

ZephyrPhantom wrote:
Design a creature with an interesting drawback.

Note: As its challenge was quite similar, please don't reuse your entries from CotW #137 (and I actually believe there was another similar one in the past). ~Daij_Djan

To increase your chances of winning and to also make creating the poll easier on whomever is doing so, please try to use a render.
Additionally, please try to keep your entry edits all in one post - if you need to change it you can put your old entry in a spoiler marked "Old entry" and leave the newest rendition to be seen. Just use the edit button in the bottom/right of your original post.

And now, time to begin the challenge!

Best of luck, competitors!

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Thu, 2017-09-07 01:36
spazlaz

dq

Mon, 2017-09-04 20:22
Asthanius
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Double Agent 1 mana symbolGreen mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Nymph Rogue Rare
Vigilance
Whenever Double Agent attacks, both you and defending player each look at the other player’s hand.
2/4
There’s no better spy than the one that everybody naturally trusts.

@spazlaz: It has to be a creature.

Wed, 2017-09-06 20:38
kinotherapy
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EDIT: changed my entry cause I wasn't happy with cycling, replaced it with something way more flavourful. With the new ability and @ jacqui's recommendation I couldn't decide between Black mana symbol and Red mana symbol so I made it both. Please let me know if this a dumb mistake

Primeval Bedlam
Creature - Avatar Rare
Primeval Bedlam gets -X/-X, where X is the number of lands you control.
Unearth—Sacrifice a land. (Sacrifice a land: Return this card from your graveyard to the battlefield. It gains haste. Exile it at the beginning of the next end step or if it would leave the battlefield. Unearth only as a sorcery.)
In the beginning, there was chaos. In the end, there will be chaos once more.
4/4

Old
Something I designed but never posted for the 1-drop contest (something very similar was posted anyway, I think)

Primeval Gloom
Creature - Avatar Rare
Primeval Gloom gets -X/-X, where X is the number of lands you control.
Cycling 1 mana symbolBlack mana symbol (1 mana symbolBlack mana symbol, Discard this card: Draw a card.)
In the beginning, there was darkness.
4/4

I have a feeling we'll see a lot of black cards this week

Mon, 2017-09-04 19:45
sdfkjgh
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A nice, simple design this time; no extraneous bells or whistles.

Lord of Hemophagy 2 mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Creature--Vampire Uncommon
Flying
Other creatures you control get -1/-1.
Lord of Hemophagy gets +1/+1 for each other creature you control.
3/3

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Mon, 2017-09-04 23:25
ZephyrPhantom
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@spazlaz - I love the card, but Asthanius is right, that's unfortunately not a creature in any form.

@sdfkjgh - This is definitely one of your better designs.

Arrogant Mentor 2 mana symbolBlack mana symbolRed mana symbol
Creature - Vampire Wizard Uncommon
Flying, haste
Whenever ~ attacks, it deals 1 damage to target creature without a +1/+1 counter on it, then put a +1/+1 counter on that creature.
3/1
"My immortal legacy shall live on through my trusted lieges."


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Fri, 2017-09-08 14:25
thehuw
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Granite Golem 3 mana symbol
Creature - Golem Uncommon
Trample
Granite Golem gets -1/-1 for each basic land type among lands you control.
"Back then, stone was all we had."
- Nalyr, wasteland hermit

4/4

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
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Tue, 2017-09-05 01:12
ZephyrPhantom
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@Huw - Just curious, is the intent for this to go into monoGreen mana symbol or mono-Wastes in Limited? Not sure if there's some sort of synergy I'm missing here.


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Tue, 2017-09-05 01:29
thehuw
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@Zephyr: It's not designed first and foremost for Limited, but I think the "correct" strategy is to draft mostly monocolor and, if you're playing other colors, get your fixing elsewhere (from dorks, rocks etcetera).

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
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Tue, 2017-09-05 02:54
ZephyrPhantom
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@Sylphiod - Creature Stick out your tongue

@Huw - What was it designed for then if you don't mind me asking? Am admittedly trying to figure out how to slip this thing into a deck as I type. Stick out your tongue


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Tue, 2017-09-05 04:41
Sylphiod
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sad I'll get a new card soon

Tue, 2017-09-05 05:08
Gorgonzola
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I hope the drawback is interesting enuff.

Unstable Tyrant 4 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Creature - Dragon Rare
Flying
Red mana symbol: ~ gets +1/+0 until end of turn.
At the beginning of your upkeep, if Mountain is the most common land type among lands you control or is tied for most common, destroy all Mountains.
6/6

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I just dont understand why people pay thousands for a piece of cardboard.
Why just don't play some casual? Gee, it isn't even fun to play with, and especially against.

Tue, 2017-09-05 10:48
Tarvoc
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@Spazlaz: You better keep that Dreadbore in your hand until you need to blow him up. Stick out your tongue But seriously, I like this. If the contest didn't say it needs to be a creature, this would get my vote.

@Sylphioid: Why would anyone play this instead of just putting in another plains? It seems almost strictly worse than a plains to me. I guess I could see it in an Eldrazi deck, but it seems a bit unreliable even for that.

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Freedom (Red mana symbol) through Knowledge (Blue mana symbol) and Organization (White mana symbol).

Tue, 2017-09-05 11:49
jacqui-pup
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@Huw/Zephyr: There's no way you designed this not realizing it's a turn-one cast with Mishra's Workshop, right? Good design otherwise.

@Gorgonzola: Slight problem here in the inclusion of firebreathing, as in mono-Red mana symbol you can just float all your red mana and spend it on the guy for a 12/6 flier.

@Zephyr: I designed a highly similar card called "Disciple of Marilyn Manson" based on that one rumor everyone knows about Marilyn Manson. Which is to say, I find the flavor of this card a little... dirty...

@kinotherapy: It works in Black mana symbol (Death's Shadow) but I think it's better suited to Red mana symbol, which gets land sac more often

[center]"It's exciting to create something that demonstrates how clever you are, that you pushed in a direction that players didn't anticipate. The problem is that the point of game design isn't to be clever, it's to create a great game." --Mark Rosewater

Tue, 2017-09-05 11:49
jacqui-pup
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Also every one of you who voted for Jump // Conclusions can rot in hell, just saying

[center]"It's exciting to create something that demonstrates how clever you are, that you pushed in a direction that players didn't anticipate. The problem is that the point of game design isn't to be clever, it's to create a great game." --Mark Rosewater

Tue, 2017-09-05 12:48
thehuw
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@jacqui-pup: I don't design with Vintage or other fictional formats in mind. That said, thanks A happy smile

I totally agree on Jump to Conclusions, though. Far be it from me to tell people what to vote for, but come on.

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
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Tue, 2017-09-05 13:37
Neottolemo
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@Zephyr and jacqui-pup: You know, that legend also exists in Italy, except instead of Marilyn Manson it's Gabriele D'Annunzio, an Italian poet born in 1863 who died in 1938 and most likely purposefully spread that rumor about himself to become more famous, just as he faked his own death for the same reason. That may be where the more modern versions of the legend come from. I think Arrogant Mentor's flavour seems fine, though. Heads up: it's supposed to be Black mana symbolRed mana symbol, not Red mana symbolBlack mana symbol.

Tue, 2017-09-05 13:45
Atreoss

Spoiler:

Tue, 2017-09-05 14:04
Neottolemo
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Priest of the Pit 3 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbolRed mana symbol
Creature - Human Demon Cleric Mythic Rare
Flying, haste
At the beginning of combat on your turn, gain control of target creature. Untap it. It gains haste until end of turn.
At the beginning of your upkeep, Priest of the Pit deals 7 damage to you or to target creature you control other than Priest of the Pit.
7/7

Tue, 2017-09-05 14:25
angel666
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Wait, what's the problem with Jump to Conclusions?

Barren Crawler 1 mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Creature — Crocodile Zombie Rare
~ can't block.
Whenever an opponent plays a nonblack spell, tap ~.
4/3

Tue, 2017-09-05 14:26
Cajun
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Jump to Conclusions 1 mana symbolGreen mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Sorcery
Destroy target creature.

@angel666: What's wrong with this card?

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Tue, 2017-09-05 14:50
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Granite Golem is really only an ok turn one play for workshops though. Vintage is feaking nuts y'all!

Jump to Conclusions is fine. Both effects are in color. It only destroys a creature if there is no other flyers which I suppose can happen often. I have actually used this strategy in limited before to give my opponent's creatures flying so I can kill it with an anti-flyer card. I do think that Conclusions should cost more though.

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Tue, 2017-09-05 14:56
angel666
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@Cajun: So, Consign//Oblivion is a 5 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlack mana symbol — Destroy target nonland permanent? Turn//Burn a 3 mana symbolBlue mana symbolRed mana symbol — Destroy target creature?

I don't understand why so much hate for the card o.O

Tue, 2017-09-05 15:31
Asthanius
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@angel: Consign//Oblivion only works like that if they have no other cards in hand, which is less likely than them having other fliers, and regardless has been printed in modern Magic with cards like Dinrova Horror. Turn//Burn is similarly a severe bend, as Red mana symbol gets to deal large amounts of damage to creatures by spending enough mana, and 5 is usually enough - it's not perfect, but like I said, it's a severe bend. Jump//Conclusions on the other hand takes advantage of the fact that most decks in limited and constructed won't have many fliers, if any, to destroy whatever creature you choose.

Tue, 2017-09-05 17:19
Inverness
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Out of curiosity, would symmetrical effects work for this? IE if the card has a negative effect that applies to both your opponent(s) and yourself? Or a positive effect that your opponents also got to take advantage of?

Tue, 2017-09-05 19:18
ZephyrPhantom
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@Inverness - Those are both fine.

@jacqui - Wow that completely flew over my head lol. I guess this also works in some budget Tron build out there if you somehow can't afford any better options.

@jacqui/Neo - I actually based this on the idea of Sith Lords training apprentices to carry on their legacy with the apprentice inevitably killing the lord, but that's much more hilarious and better fitting in my opinion.

@Jump//Conclusions - Praise Vectron for giving us this holy miracle. May he forever guide us with great stuff and encourage us to keep putting creature kill in Simic.


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Tue, 2017-09-05 19:43
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Tue, 2017-09-05 22:21
Wapulatus
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Keeper of Equity 3 mana symbolWhite mana symbol

Creature - Human Knight Uncommon

First strike

When ~ enters the battlefield and at the beginning of your upkeep, detain target nonland permanent you control. (Until your next turn, that permanent can't attack or block and its activated abilities can't be activated.)

"The first people to obey any law are those who make it"

5/4

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@Asthanius Thanks for the feedback! I'll edit it.

Tue, 2017-09-05 20:04
sdfkjgh
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@jacqui, @Neot: I'm not entirely familiar with Marilyn Manson rumors. Does it have anything to do with Salvador Dali?

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Tue, 2017-09-05 21:48
Asthanius
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@wapulatus: I'd change the trigger to be when it enters the battlefield and at the beginning of your upkeep. Otherwise, it doesn't keep you from attacking, which means it's pretty broken in an aggro deck.

Tue, 2017-09-05 23:42
Ziolang
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Wow so many noncreature entries in a creature only contest.


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Wed, 2017-09-06 00:16
Sylphiod
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@burningcreator none of them ever tried it

Wed, 2017-09-06 02:12
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Slinking Serpent 2 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Serpent Uncommon
Whenever two or more creatures attack, exile CARDNAME. Return it to the battlefield at the beginning of the next end step.
"No one's ever seen it. Wonder why?"
--Serena, Sailor of Tides

5/5

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Wed, 2017-09-06 02:39
ZephyrPhantom
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@Yoshi - IMHO this is an excellent riff on Blue having been one of the exalted colors and its general need for trying to have a protected finisher creature in control.


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Wed, 2017-09-06 04:04
Quazer Flame

This one was FUN to come up with. Bring on the Zombie Rat apocalypse!

Wed, 2017-09-06 12:25
Mikhail

Double Agent Archdemon 2BBB
Creature — Demon Mythic Rare
Flying, Trample
At the beginning of each opponent’s upkeep, that player reveals the top card of his or her library, put that card into his or her hand and lose life equal to its converted mana cost.
7/7

Wed, 2017-09-06 14:07
one1eye1

Wed, 2017-09-06 18:34
Heads vs Tails
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Wed, 2017-09-06 23:41
Aarhg
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Runed Messenger 2 mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Bird Uncommon
Flying
Whenever Runed Messenger deals combat damage to a player, draw a card.
When Runed Messenger dies, each opponent draws a card.
As it observes and overhears, information is magically recorded on its dark pinions.
1/2

Thu, 2017-09-07 01:35
spazlaz

Thu, 2017-09-07 04:38
Quazer Flame

@spazlaz Wow. And if you stifle the ETB trigger, you end up not having to give control of your turn to anyone.

Thu, 2017-09-07 04:49
spazlaz

@Quazer Flame: Check this card out

Thu, 2017-09-07 07:24
Fermat

Roaming Rack 3 mana symbol
Artifact Creature — Construct Uncommon
Flash
When ~ enters the battlefield, exile all cards from your hand face down until ~ leaves the battlefield.
"So you're telling me you accidentally locked your research papers in this pathetic trestle of yours and forgot where you left the key? Surely you have better excuses than that to conceal your incompetence."
—Tezzeret

4/4

Thu, 2017-09-07 22:11
Daij_Djan
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Taking on a challenge given by Neottolemo (to be fair: I mostly took the challenge upon myself Stick out your tongue ), here's my attempt at fulfilling this challenge with a white common:

I like turning downsides into upsides Winking smiley

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Fri, 2017-09-08 14:05
Ziolang
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Fri, 2017-09-08 11:38
Billklanidi
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@spaslaz Your card seems really interesting, however I think that one mana is too little. Maybe up the cost to two or three.

Once in a while, it's so much fun to gamble with death.

Fri, 2017-09-08 11:55
Daij_Djan
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@Ziolang: That ability doesn't work as you want it to as you can never fail to sacrifice each other creature you control. If you control no others, then sacrificing none still fits the requirement Winking smiley You should go with "If no creature is sacrificed this way, .." instead.

@thehuw: Quite some time ago, I tried I similar approach (with very different stats/costs, though Winking smiley ), so I'm passing on the feedback I received back then: It's a little weird to see a card with a negative Domain ability for the same reasons WotC avoids downside keywords nowadays.

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Fri, 2017-09-08 14:06
Ziolang
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Thanks, updated~


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Fri, 2017-09-08 14:27
thehuw
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@Daij: Thanks for the advice. I'd been wondering whether actually using domain would work for a drawback, and I reckon you're right and have edited accordingly - the design is functionally identical but I've cut domain. Inventors' Fair and Sporemound say this is probably fine.

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Fri, 2017-09-08 14:29
Inverness
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Finally got an entry I like. Symmetrical effects are usually pretty interesting, in my experience.

Fri, 2017-09-08 14:31
thehuw
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@Inverness: Hi there, "opponent can't cast anything for X+1 turns". That seems a bit much to me.

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