Card of the Week Contest #155: One for the History Book, Folks

Mon, 2017-02-13 09:35
Daij_Djan
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Welcome to the Card of the Week Contest! To participate in this Contest you'll have to design a card along the contest guidelines and throw it into the arena with other competitors' entries! At the end of each week, a winner will be determined by forum poll. The winner's card will be rendered and featured on the Welcome page, and the winner decides the challenge for the next week's Contest!

Here we go, competitors: our hundred and fifty-fifth challenge!


The winner of the "Kick Me!" poll was ThisisSakon with...

And the challenge issued by our winner was...

ThisisSakon wrote:
The real world has an endless supply of amazing eras of history. From the Roman Empire to the Grand Age of Piracy to the Swingin' Sixties history has provided us with countless stories to tell and retell! So this week, make a card from any era of history you choose!

Note: Feel free to add a short explanation to your card if you want - it'll be included in the poll! ~Daij_Djan

To increase your chances of winning and to also make creating the poll easier on whomever is doing so, please try to use a render.
Additionally, please try to keep your entry edits all in one post - if you need to change it you can put your old entry in a spoiler marked "Old entry" and leave the newest rendition to be seen. Just use the edit button in the bottom/right of your original post.

And now, time to begin the challenge!

Best of luck, competitors!

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Mon, 2017-02-13 09:57
Nhoj2307

waffling

I quite like this challenge, this will hopefully get a nice wide array of choices from across time with our collective brain power.

From the Industrial Revolution comes my entry:

Steam Engine 3 mana symbol
Artifact
Rare

Tap symbol Add Colorless mana symbol to your mana pool.

Vehicle permanents you control may tap ~ as if it were a creature with 2 power.

Mon, 2017-02-13 09:58
ZephyrPhantom
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New entry in the works.

Spoiler:


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Mon, 2017-02-13 10:50
Daij_Djan
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Dropping the concept already (as I just came up with it Winking smiley ), render (with proper name and flavor) to be added later:

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Discovery of America Blue mana symbol
Instant Common
Discover. If you discovered a land card, scry 2.

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Thu, 2017-02-16 12:38
finofashark
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Consuming Inferno 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Enchantment - Aura Mythic Rare
Enchant land
For as long as that land is enchanted, it has "At the beginning of your upkeep, this land deals 1 damage to you, then create a copy of ~."

So great fire of London and I always liked Obsidian Fireheart but he was never very good. But does this even work? I want it so the enchantments get thrown onto each side of the battlefield so that the battlefield ends up burning.

workspace
Consuming Inferno 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Enchantment Mythic Rare
2 mana symbol: Put a blaze counter on target land without a blaze counter on it. For as long as that land has a blaze counter on it, it has "At the beginning of your upkeep, this land deals 1 damage to you." Any player can activate this ability(The land continues to burn after ~ has left the battlefield.)
4 mana symbol: Remove a counter from target land, any player can activate this ability.

Old
Remembrance 1 mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Instant Rare
Players can't cast spells, attack with creatures or activate abilities until the end of your next turn.

Unfun? Probably unfun. I will think of something else

Tue, 2017-02-14 14:56
Mahx Michael
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Why not just jump on the same wave as ZephyrPhantom:
While Obama was the "Herald of Change", Trump was the coming change

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Trump, Bringer of Change 3 mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Planeswalker - Trump Mythic Rare
+1 Loyalty: Target opponent discards a card and you draw a card.
-3 Loyalty: Return each creature that entered the battlefield during target opponent’s last turn to their owner’s hand.
-9 Loyalty: You get an emblem with “Creatures your opponents control can’t attack you or planeswalkers you control".
Trump, Bringer of Change can be your commander.
Starting Loyalty: 5

X will be replaced with numbers later...
And I'll probably find a better title... maybe...
And mana cost might also change...

Don't we have M15 planeswalkers with 4 abilities yet??

Tue, 2017-02-14 20:33
thehuw
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This challenge is a history major's dream - I had a really hard time deciding where I'd find my inspiration. This first pass, based on the execution of King Charles I at the end of the English Civil War, might not be my final entry.

render

Capital Coup Black mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Sorcery Uncommon
Target player sacrifices a creature with the greatest power among creatures they control.
"Cruel necessity."
- Oliver Cromwell

@Mahx: The standard template should expand automatically with a fourth line if you hit Enter at the end of the third.

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
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Mon, 2017-02-13 11:46
Daij_Djan
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And here we go:

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Mon, 2017-02-13 12:03
Mahx Michael
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@thehuw
WOW! FANCY!!


Updated my concept. I'm not sure about the -3 Loyalty ability, it might have to be a bit more expensive or i must make it a single target or X multiplier.
Neither sure if I should give him the commander ability...

Mon, 2017-02-13 14:54
Inverness
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One of the most (if not the most) famous historical figures (whether you believe in him or not) was Jesus. I know it's generally frowned on to make cards about religious figures, but I tried to look at it purely from a historical perspective.

Jesus of Nazareth

"I did not come to destroy the Law, but to Fulfill it."

Mon, 2017-02-13 17:58
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Big Bang X mana symbolRed/green mana symbolRed/green mana symbolRed/green mana symbolRed/green mana symbol
Sorcery Mythic Rare
You may reveal this card from your opening hand. If you do, at the beginning of the first upkeep, each player casts a copy of this spell without paying its mana cost. (X is 0.)
Shuffle your library, then reveal the top seven cards of your library. Put each permanent card with converted mana cost X or less onto the battlefield tapped and the rest into your graveyard.

[center]"It's exciting to create something that demonstrates how clever you are, that you pushed in a direction that players didn't anticipate. The problem is that the point of game design isn't to be clever, it's to create a great game." --Mark Rosewater

Mon, 2017-02-13 15:33
ThisisSakon
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Hey what a surprise it's Festenya. Prohibition era, get rich off cheap booze, then buy or bury anyone who questions the legitimacy.

Mon, 2017-02-13 15:51
Mahx Michael
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My concept does fit the contest, right? The current is also part of history if I'm not wrong.
Can anyone help me out with the -3 Loyalty ability, or the card in general?


If planeswalkers had flavor text, this would probably be mine:
Donald Trump is like Sword Art Online. You either love it or you hate it, but either way it's a good show...

Mon, 2017-02-13 16:28
jacqui-pup
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Sakon should have added a "pre-2000" clause precisely to prevent Trump entries, smh

[center]"It's exciting to create something that demonstrates how clever you are, that you pushed in a direction that players didn't anticipate. The problem is that the point of game design isn't to be clever, it's to create a great game." --Mark Rosewater

Mon, 2017-02-13 18:00
Ziolang
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Joan of Arc


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Mon, 2017-02-13 18:04
Mahx Michael
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What do you say Sakon? Does it pass?

Tue, 2017-02-14 17:38
sdfkjgh
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inadvertent trolling
So, since every civilization has had slave labor, my entry seems timeless, as it comes from ALL times, amirite?

Slave Labor Black mana symbolBlack mana symbolGreen mana symbolGreen mana symbolBlue mana symbol (Black mana symbolGreen mana symbolBlue mana symbol is the official order, so why doesn't MSE follow it?)
Enchantment Rare
As Slave Labor enters the battlefield, choose a creature type. When Slave Labor enters the battlefield, tap all creatures of the chosen type. Creatures tapped this way can’t be untapped as long as Slave Labor is on the battlefield.
At the beginning of each player’s precombat main phase, for each creature tapped by Slave Labor that player controls, that player adds to his or her mana pool one mana of any type. If a mana produced this way would be emptied from a player’s mana pool as a step or phase ends without being spent, that player and you get a tarnish counter.
When a player has 15 or more tarnish counters, that player loses the game.

Look, top-down design is always gonna have lengthier text than anything else, that's the nature of designing to a preexisting concept.

Henry Ford may have been a horrible human being, but his ideas about engineering were spot-on.

PAY NO ATTENTION TO THE MISTAKE BEHIND THE CURTAIN

Mechanized Production 4 mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Enchantment Rare
Artifact spells you cast cost 1 mana symbol less to cast and have improvise.



Assembly Line 6 mana symbol
Artifact Rare
Artifact spells you cast cost 1 less to cast and have improvise. (Your artifacts can help cast those spells. Each artifact you tap after you’re done activating mana abilities pays for 1.)

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Mon, 2017-02-13 18:27
Ziolang
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@Yoshi By the way I'm pretty sure the future doesn't fit into a contest lined "era of history" but I digress.

@President entries: I don't think modern day fits "era of history" either but that's probably a greyer area.

@sdfkjgh: Um, no. Top-down designs do NOT need stupidly long lines of text. The concept of slave labor could be boiled down to a single line of text:

"Gain control of target creature."


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Mon, 2017-02-13 19:15
thehuw
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@sdfkjgh: My soul is evaporating through my skin.

And just for clarity, this is not a good thing.

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
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Mon, 2017-02-13 19:46
ZephyrPhantom
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Honestly I deliberately entered an Obama entry in hopes of making a good spirited modern era entry, but at this rate I think I'm going to switch my entry because it ended up prompting Trump memes and that's exactly what I was hoping to avoid. :/

@sdfkjgh: I'm sorry, but this card is objectively bad for multiple reasons - tasteless art, a very gimmicky win-con that takes way more reading than its worth, likely to cause draws, and does such a messy effect scramble that the color identity becomes very hard to pick out. You're making something on par with Ice Cauldron levels of wordy where a much more straightfoward design would suffice.


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Mon, 2017-02-13 19:50
Cajun
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Legend of El Dorado White mana symbolBlack mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Enchantment Uncommon
Whenever a creature enters the battlefield, profit. (Create a colorless Gold artifact token with "Sacrifice this artifact: Add one mana of any color to your mana pool.")
Whenever a creature dies, you may sacrifice three Gold tokens. If you do, return that creature to the battlefield under your control except it becomes an enchantment instead of its other types.

While the city of gold was just a myth, it appears to have started as El Ray Dorado 'the gold king', a ritual where the dead king was dusted in gold and immortalized. Legend hits that and the conquistadors searching for gold.

Quote:
My soul is evaporating through my skin.

And just for clarity, this is not a good thing.

Quotes like these always make me miss the old mega-signatures. Can't fit many in MSE's character limit.

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Mon, 2017-02-13 19:51
jacqui-pup
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In the interest of being positive, I'd like to note that sdfkjgh managed to make a design where the invocation of chattel slavery was only the second most offensive aspect of the design. That's impressive!

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Mon, 2017-02-13 19:53
Daij_Djan
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@"is the present history": As it's kind of hard to draw a line here, I'd say everything up till now fits the history category (given ThisisSakon doesn't disagree with me here). Some might not like "too recent" entries, though. Also the future is not yet history.

@sdfkjgh: MSE still follows the pre-Tarkir color sorting. That aside: Top-down designs indeed often tend to have lengthier design - yet good top-down design doesn't need it imho.

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Tue, 2017-02-14 14:36
Neottolemo
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Not my entries
I'm considering a number of entries but haven't decided on one yet. I'll be posting here these anyway. I'm probably going with Machtpolitik or a rebalanced Sinister Vow, but I don't know yet.

Sinister Vow 3 mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Sorcery Uncommon
Draw three cards, then discard a card. Sinister Vow deals damage equal to that card's converted mana cost divided as you choose between any number of creatures you don't control and 3 damage to you.

^References the Oath of Sansepolcro in occasion of the forming of the movement that would become the Fascist Party led by Mussolini.

Legend of the Knife in the Back 5 mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Legendary Enchantment Rare
At the beginning of each opponent's upkeep, for each creature that player controls, they may pay 2 mana symbol or 2 life. If they don't, you gain control of that creature.

^I don't know if this is how it's called in English, but basically the right-wing extremists spread this false rumour during the days of the Republic of Weimar, according to which Germany could've won the first World War, but lost because they were betrayed by democrats and republicans within the country, who intentionally wanted them to lose. As a result of that legend and a couple other factors, many German people never trusted republican institutions during those days.

Vernacular Deposition 1 mana symbolBlue mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Sorcery Rare
As an additional cost to cast Vernacular Deposition, tap any number of creatures you control with total power 6 or more.
Untap target land and gain control of it. You gain 1 life for each permanent you control.
"Sao ko kelle terre, per kelle fini que ki contene, trenta anni le possette parte Sancti Benedicti."

^Best Stone Rain ever, isn't it? Anyway, this is based on the Placiti Cassinesi, a series of depositions that were released around 960 in Italy and that are the first recorded example of use of written vulgar language (not 'vulgar' as in 'rude', but as in 'not Latin') in an official setting in Italy.

Machtpolitik 3 mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
Enchantment Uncommon
Creatures you control get +1/+0.
Whenever three or more creatures you control attack, untap target land and gain control of it as long as you control Machtpolik.

^Aggressive, imperialistic late-1800s politics perpetrated by various states but especially by post-Bismarck, Kaiser Wilhelm the II era Second Reich Germany.

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Mon, 2017-02-13 20:07
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Some men are destined to lead movements that change history.

Others are destined to end them.


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Mon, 2017-02-13 20:41
ThisisSakon
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"Too recent" entries are fine, if not generically bland. Today is the history of tomorrow I suppose, so if you can justify it then go for it

Tue, 2017-02-14 14:56
Mahx Michael
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*Sigh!* Ok, I guess I'll go for something else.
Im not sure what color this should be:

Old Entry wrote:
Colonize 2 mana symbolRed mana symbol
Enchantment - Aura Common
Enchant land
When Colonize enters the battlefield, draw a card.
You control enchanted land.

(I used Orcish Squatters as reference when deciding on colors.)

Mon, 2017-02-13 20:47
Daij_Djan
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@Mahx Michael: Color is totally fine - but that card is insanely overpowered Winking smiley Stone Rain is considered too strong by nowadays standards and your card even ramps you and cantrips as well..

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Mon, 2017-02-13 21:21
Mahx Michael
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@Daji_Djan
Ok, thanks for feedback! A happy smile

But actually, I think I might go for this instead:

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Queen Elisabeth I 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Human Monarch Mythic Rare
Whenever Queen Elisabeth I deals combat damage to a player, put a +1/+1 counter on her and gain control of target land that player controls.
1/1

Maybe I should increase the mana cost with 1 mana symbol? Though, a ramp card doesn't have too much value if it can't be used in early game...

Mon, 2017-02-13 22:19
sdfkjgh
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@errbody: Should I simplify it by removing the moralizing aspects (the "slavery tarnishes your soul" parts)?

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Sat, 2017-02-18 20:51
TheBrokenUrn
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How about one of my favorite historical topics when I was growing up?

Context? The man (once popularly called the Ice Man) was discovered in the Alps in 1991. Speculation regarding his death and why his body was so well preserved were hot topics. However, the identity of Oetzi still linger as a mystery. Many theories exist from a tribal chieftain, a trader from another place, or even an aged thief. My entry focuses on the chieftain theory.

Chief Oetzi of the Alps 4 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Human Hunter Rare
~ enters the battlefield with three charge counters on it.
Green mana symbol, Remove a charge counter from it: ~ fights target creature.
Red mana symbol, Remove a charge counter from it: ~ deals 2 damage to target creature or 1 damage to target player.
4/4

I do have an older version to it here.

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Mon, 2017-02-13 23:16
Gurfle
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Inspired by the Berlin Wall and the events that came with it.
(Unfortunately, I could not find a more suitable/dramatic photograph or art piece of it-- if anyone happens to find one, let me know.)

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Mon, 2017-02-13 23:23
Cajun
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I'd start simplifying by not making 100+ word cards all the time. Cards start to shrink around 40 words and you consistently destroy that limit.

And Tarkir wedges can be added by the 'Wedge Mana Costs' dropdown in Set Info

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Sun, 2017-02-19 07:54
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@Daij_Djan, I am assuming we can add a short summery since some figures may not be that well known.

François Duvalier White mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Legendary Creature - Human :mmythic:
Tap symbol: Return target creature you control to its owners hand.
At the beggining of your upkeep if you control 3 or more creatures than any other player, exile ~ and return it to the battlefield transformed.

Papa Doc
Black/red color identity Planeswalker - François Mythic Rare
+1 You may sacrifice a creature. If you do, scry 2.
-1 Create a 2/2 black and red Soldier creature token named Tonton Macoute.
-1 Destroy up to X target creatures, where X is the number of Tonton Macoute you control.
3

First this is a very short summery.

François Duvalier who later went by Papa Doc, originally was a seemingly well meaning physician. Later do to a bunch of reasons, mainly how the country was governed by a minority, he ran in the Haitian election. However after being elected, possibly using questionable means, changed drastically. The events before he became exceedingly strange are important, but won't be covered. But when he did, he started dressing as Baron Samedi, a Loa, something akin to or the same as a god, scrying human brain matter, setting up a military police named the Tonton Macoute and killing many of his own people.

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Tue, 2017-02-14 00:32
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Render

Reign of hundred Days Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Enchantment Rare
When you control no legendary creatures, sacrifice Reign of hundred Days.
At the beginning of your upkeep, for each opponent, create two 1/1 white Soldier creature tokens.

Based on Napoleon Bonaparte's return to power in France after his exile until his final defeat at Waterloo.
Modeled after the fact that he managed to raise another army and was opposed by the other european powers.

Tue, 2017-02-14 05:09
Vunik
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I'll get a render for this in a bit, but for now...

Battle of the Bulge White mana symbolRed mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Enchantment Rare
Battle - Whenever one or more creatures attack, choose one-
* Target creature you control gains hexproof and first strike until end of turn.
* Target creature can't block until end of turn.

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Fri, 2017-02-17 19:07
Mort
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Taking inspiration here from Agincourt. I tried to tone down the damage output of the Hail in order to represent the fact that most of the French casualties occurred in the melee that followed while crippled in the mud after the initial longbow fire.

Hail of Arrows White mana symbol
Instant Uncommon
~ deals 1 damage to each attacking or blocking creature your opponents control.
The French men-at-arms pushed forward across the sodden muddy fields, their passage crippled only more by the storm of English arrows.

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EDIT: Updated the rarity in order to better fit in line with Rain of Blades. While rain itself was never spectacular and probably could do with a little power bump, similar X for 1s are rarely seen out of re nowadays.

Tue, 2017-02-14 07:49
thehuw
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@sdfkjgh: I'd simplify this card by scrapping it, starting again, and not trying to make a card about <redacted> slavery!

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
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Tue, 2017-02-14 08:50
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Just to be clear, making a card about slavery is okay if the presentation respects the material. Making a card with offensive or derogatory implications to the material in question is not.


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Tue, 2017-02-14 09:13
Fermat

Tireless Inventor 1 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature — Human Artificer Uncommon
Flying
Inspired — Whenever ~ becomes untapped, you may pay 1 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol. If you do, search your library for an artifact card, reveal it, put that card into your hand, then shuffle your library.
"We've conquered the skies with steel wings, but there are many more designs just waiting to be discovered."
2/3

Tue, 2017-02-14 10:49
Sylphiod
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I haven't done this in a while
Axis//Allies
Axis X mana symbolBlack mana symbol:
Sorcery Mythic Rare
For every two mana spent to cast this spell, you may destroy target creature.
Fuse
Allies X mana symbolWhite mana symbol:
Sorcery Mythic Rare
For each mana spent to cast this, create a 1/1 white soldier creature token.
Fuse

Tue, 2017-02-14 11:01
Angelic_Bovines
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@Sylphiod

I assume Axis and Allies do not refer to mana spent on X because then you would just use the traditional X templating. If that's true, then they're really busted. Axis is very strong: two mana to kill one, four mana to kill two, and six mana to kill three are individually strong and much better given you have to option to choose between them. Allies is less busted for still strong - n tokens for n mana is strong at every n except one, and even better if you can choose (as far as I'm aware, token-making X-spells have always costed at least X and a colour). Each side should also cost more than what it would as an individual card.

Tue, 2017-02-14 11:58
finofashark
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@Sylphiod current wording on your card means for 2 mana symbolBlack mana symbolWhite mana symbol I can destroy two target creatures and create 2 1/1s which is insanely good.

Tue, 2017-02-14 12:34
Daij_Djan
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Also Axis doesn't work as intended. When you cast a spell, you first choose all modes and name all targets and then pay its cost(s)..

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Tue, 2017-02-14 12:53
Inverness
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Zephyr:
I don't know what you were expecting. Any modern politics entry is going to breed more modern politics entries, inevitably ones that you don't like. /shrug

Tue, 2017-02-14 14:35
jacqui-pup
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Thoughts

Nhoj: Neat, but probably worded better as an activated ability: "Tap symbol: Target Vehicle becomes a creature."

finofashark: Vague in addition to being painfully unfun

Zeph: Is this meant to counteract commander tax?

Vunik: The literal least necessary keyword ever award goes to...

Mort: Hail of Arrows. And this is a little good considering Rain of Blades.

Sylph: Literally zero reason this should have fuse, flavorfully. And also this should totally be X mana symbolX mana symbolBlack mana symbol and X mana symbolWhite mana symbol costs.

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Tue, 2017-02-14 14:46
Mahx Michael
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@jacqui-pup
What about mine, is the cost ok?

@jacqui-pup, @Sylphoid
Isn't fuse necessery for one to be able to cast both halves?

Tue, 2017-02-14 15:20
jacqui-pup
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I think it's fine, but be aware she is almost never triggering without external help. That's fine since getting Conquer on combat damage is reeeally good (it's ramp + land destruction basically)

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Tue, 2017-02-14 15:22
finofashark
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@Jacqui-pup I had suspected it would be unfun but just want to check the effect lasts until the end of your next end step so you effectively timewalk yourself. It does stop your opponent and allow you to dig a bit deeper for an answer but you are punished as equally as your opponent. With that in mind still unfun? (at least it doesn't come with a 13/13 body attached I guess)

Tue, 2017-02-14 15:30
Nhoj2307

Thank you very much for the critique Jacqui, and would probably have went with that if it didn't mean 4/4 flyers, 7/11 ground dudes and 8/6 evasive creatures all getting in from one tap. Don't want to bust vehicles more than they are.

Tue, 2017-02-14 16:10
jacqui-pup
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Maybe add 2 mana symbol to the activation cost (compare to Peacewalker Colossus)?

[center]"It's exciting to create something that demonstrates how clever you are, that you pushed in a direction that players didn't anticipate. The problem is that the point of game design isn't to be clever, it's to create a great game." --Mark Rosewater