Card of the Week Contest #144: Go Big or Go Home

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Thu, 2016-11-24 18:20
Mahx Michael
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Ok, tell me wich of these I should use for the entry underneath:

  • Keep it as is.
  • Reduce modifier to red and white creatures.
  • Make them not have haste.
  • Totally scrap the idea of Instant Army.

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Instant Army 8 mana symbolRed mana symbolWhite mana symbol
Instant Uncommon
Put X 1/1 red and white Soldier creature tokens with haste onto the battlefield, where X is the number of red and the number of white non-land cards in your graveyard.

Entry wrote:
Instant Army 8 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol
Instant Uncommon
Put seven 1/1 white Soldier creature tokens onto the battlefield.

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Alternative entry:

Spoiler:
Bringer of High Tides 7 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creaeture - Leviathan Uncommon
Bringer of High Tides has flying as long as you control a forest.
At the beginning of your upkeep, each player sacrifices a non-Island land if they have one. If a player does, he or she mey search his or her library for an island card and put it onto the battlefield tapped.

Tue, 2016-11-22 12:54
ZephyrPhantom
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@ KalvinHobbez - ALL HAIL THE GREAT LORD EGOTIST

Also, I did read your design explanation and I respect your passion for entering this contest!


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Tue, 2016-11-22 13:33
Angelus_Reprobi
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Hello, this is my first post on the forum:

Crocodile Titan 8GG
Creature - Crocodile Uncommon
Each card you exile from the top of your library while casting this spell pays for 1.
Trample
4/5

Tue, 2016-11-22 13:58
Inverness
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Mahx:

At this point it's just getting too complicated. Simplify it or scrap it.

Honestly I like the idea. Maybe you could just have "Create seven 1/1 white Soldier creature tokens" and call it a day? Seven bodies for 10 mana seems fair to me. It could still be instant IMO.

Tue, 2016-11-22 14:03
Mahx Michael
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If you use : befor each symbol in mana cost : 8 :: u :: u : without spaces, youll get 8 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol


@Iverness
For 8 mana symbolRed mana symbolWhite mana symbol or 8 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol or 9 mana symbolWhite mana symbol ?

Tue, 2016-11-22 15:17
Inverness
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I'd leave it at 8 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbol.

Tue, 2016-11-22 15:40
Mahx Michael
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Ok Thumbs up

Wed, 2016-11-23 17:20
Pixi-Rex
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It is hard not to make it too good, that it becomes a rare. I believe this is ok as a uncommon. I'm I wrong?

OLD

Old fail Entry

Also on the reminder text. Is it alright or can it be said an easier way?

NEW

New Entry

Tue, 2016-11-22 18:51
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angel666 - Welcome! My main concern with this card is that it's almost always going to be a Green mana symbolGreen mana symbol for a 4/5 Trample, which is really pushed even by Green mana symbol standards. You might want to bring that down to a 3/5, I think.

@ Pixi - "If you do, its abilities don't trigger when it enters the battlefield."


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Tue, 2016-11-22 18:55
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@ZephyrPhantom: are you surn. I worded it after Torpor Orb. I was thinking the if if said "when it enters the battlefield" in the riminder text, it will be too late because its two things "triggers" at the same time.

Tue, 2016-11-22 18:59
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@ Pixi - Fair enough, but then it should say "it doesn't cause its abilities to trigger"


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Tue, 2016-11-22 19:39
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@ZephyrPhantom: aaaaahhh. that could work. I will try to edit it.

Tue, 2016-11-22 20:14
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Now my entry comes with a spoopy render! Check it out.

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Tue, 2016-11-22 20:33
Mahx Michael
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Having a hard time finding art for my render. It's so dificult to find a picture if you have already pictured it in your head beforehand. Some of you hace not by any means stumbled upon an image that fits thus description:
Its like a beam of light that hits the ground and suddenly there's an army there, can you picture it?

Tue, 2016-11-22 20:49
Pixi-Rex
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@Mahx Michael: I also found that to be a problem. therefore for most of the time, I do TOP DOWN designs for CotW. That way the art fit 100 % what you want.
Sorry I don't have seen an art on deviantart. but if you have time. you can look for yourself. I did the seach for you. Big smile

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Tue, 2016-11-22 21:05
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Some responses and card comments incoming.

ZephyrPhantom
Oh thanks man! I knew someone would recognize it was Scornful Egotist eventually, I initially found the card to be funny how ridiculous the cost was. But being justifiable with the converted mana cost affecting effects made him seem a bit more interesting to me, but the jokes just completed him for me. But yeah, I get oddly into card design. I don't really have anyone to talk to about it, so I guess I throw all my comments and ideas into one area. I honestly didn't think I'd have much to say for whatever I made for this contest, but ultimately did like what I came up with and the path I took to do as such.

Daij_Djan
This honestly seems like something straight out of Shards of Alara. It makes sense with domain and balances itself out due to it. In deck building it seems a bit sad that it won't have much of a place in most decks, as it's a pretty straight forward card without much to be done in terms of theme behind it. Anything with green might play it for a big creature to mana ramp into, I'd say there are better options for 10 mana, but this is keeping in mind its an uncommon. What makes him pretty nice is due to decks that might play a lot of nonbasics to do something like Temple of the False God with Ancient Tomb or an artifact like Mana Crypt, as a Blood Moon is a sure fire way to always screw up nonbasics. So potentially artifact decks would get crazy with this card if they either were careful about their basic lands or just didnt care...but even then it still isn't an artifact itself. Note that most of these comments are just about it being in a real deck, because as a card itself it seems perfectly fine. I guess it feels a bit odd to make a comment of just "Nice card, bro" so I usually want to find something to comment on.

sdfkjgh
I like the idea of this card, but it is brutally scary in any Commander game. Any deck can run it, but especially artifact decks make for a terrifying place for this card to be in. Both due to loving the fact he's an artifact himself...but also due to a lot of artifacts coming out quick like Sol Ring, Mana Crypt, or even a measly Ornithopter would all reduce his cost while buffing him. Speaking of those first two artifacts, I'm surprised no one mentioned how many artifacts and creatures out there can make mana. Lands aren't the only ones to ever do it, and a card similar to this one exists off of that fact, Myr Superion. Something even more close to what sdfkjgh made is actually Imperiosaur (Which I remembered the mana cost and effect...but no the name, was weird trying to find it again).

Now I've been talking about only your side reducing his cost, but I mentioned earlier that he is scary in Commander. In a game of 4+ people, 10 nonland permanents is not really hard at all to access. If everyone put something into play each turn in a four player game, you'd be able to cast him on your third turn and have a 10+ creature. In Commander thankfully there is a good amount of removal. Black decks might be a bit unfortunate going with Go for the Throat but Green and Red are safe due to cards like Decimate. Even with that, that's like rationalizing that Stormtide Leviathan is perfectly fine on the field because it dies to Doom Blade. All in all, I'm not saying its a bad card, but it's just a bit strong especially for uncommon. I'd say you could throw its mana cost down to 4 or so and made it's mana cost be increased by nonland permanents instead.

jacqui_pup
An interesting mechanic, as a choice of "cheaper cost vs effect" has popped up a few times during this contest. This card is especially interesting due to using this idea well, but also keeping it under wraps to make it a proper uncommon. The card itself is not very exciting or game winning, but that's exactly what is expected of an uncommon. I do agree with thehuw as well, so he could have a stronger body on him. As he is white and about life gain, I'd say a 2/7 or something with tough toughness could make sense and make him a neat card to use. He'd definitely have a place in Doran, the Siege Tower decks.

thehuw
The card's concept is in the right place, but its a bit sad how it seems pretty weak. In the right deck, yeah a three mana but slightly weaker Overrun can be nice...but that's in the right deck. The "right deck" means you utilize the strengths of a card, rather than give a very specific effect a home. This is true sometimes, but not every time sadly. Could either pop it up to an Instant, or maybe have it be a full on Overrun with +3/+3? Not sure if it might help, but that's just how I see it.

ZephyrPhantom Again
Seems a bit like sdfkjgh's entry with an artifact golem costing less due to nonland permanents, but you have taken a much different approach with how to accomplish this. Slightly giving me elder dragon vibes, specifically the shard cycle ones like Darigaaz, the Igniter. Though this golem has a more storm oriented form on that effect, but due to being only a 5/5 it seems pretty weak now. Even with the "power and toughness equal to number of nonland permanents on the battlefield" with your reveal-from-hand effect actually might be balanced out. But besides that, I'd say he's safe to put at a 10/10 or just have him count the number of nonland permanent types on the battlefield instead. The latter might be a bit scary with artifacts, though.

fluffyDeathbringer
High toughness with menace does remind me of Ikra Shidiqi, the Usurper, but of course the effects are vastly different, though your card could make sense in Golgari. Anyways, the idea is pretty interesting yet I fear it could be easily broken in a usual Zombie deck. Knowing how zombies can be, sacrificing them usually won't mean anything, like Gravecrawler. Some card might just even benefit more from your sacrifice anyways, like Soulless One. Along with graveyard affects and if you are lacking zombies in the first place, Endless Ranks of the Dead makes for either an annoying before or after of this card being casted. So the idea is pretty neat and balanced on its own, but Zombies can probably find a way to break it. I do like the Cull mechanic as well, paired up with the token trigger makes me remember Devour...actually, in that case, imagine if you bounced the Necromancers. It's good that you balanced it out to only have one zombie per two creatures, but that is still a pretty evil thing to do if you have mana spare to have additional sacrifice options. But yeah, a nice card but I'm probably just nitpicking about real play of it.

Wapulatus
Honestly loved the idea of your old entry, and I even hate poison counters as a mechanic. If there were a way to balance out the idea into uncommon it'd be neat, but as is maybe a future contest might give that idea a home. Anyways, with your actual entry I like the idea of using Undaunted to help out a high costed spell in Commander, as Undaunted was specifically made for a lot of things this contest would ask for. As for the card itself, due to it being green I'd say turn the exile into a destroy, as exiling a creature per player is incredibly strong even for uncommon at that cost. The tokens do make for an interesting balance, though. I just imagined the synergy of your card with fluffyDeathbringers if you were facing someone with his card too. I do hope the opponent is the one who gets those tokens, because as it is worded it seems like you get those tokens and that would classify this thing as a mythic or rare. Either way, I like both your new and old entry as they make for interesting mechanics.

Yoshi
Now if you did not put that comment at the bottom, I may have not had comments for this card. But due to you mentioning its versatility, it actually did make me think more about it. As an uncommon, it makes a lot of sense and fits the rarity very well. Just a big guy for big mana that has some keywords and landcycling? He isn't much on his own, but he's just like Noble Templar...but the colors are what matter the most, as your comments subtly noted. Graveyard reanimation and mana fixing are definitely big for Golgari, and thus this kind of card would be a perfect toss in there. Of course there are crazier and more powerful additions you could throw in Doomgape but this is an uncommon and it does its job right.

Kinda tired right now, but boy did I go through a few right there. I start the next comment thinking "okay I probably dont have the energy to do another paragraph about this one" then I just start typing and, oops, another paragraph. Anyways, hope any of my words are of any help.

Tue, 2016-11-22 22:43
Daij_Djan
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@Mahx Michael: I like the card even though its name is rather bland. And while I know this isn't exactly as you invision, how about this as potential artwork?,

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Tue, 2016-11-22 23:20
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@Pixi I would literally never run a 1/4 for 3 mana symbolGreen mana symbol in limited. 8 mana symbolGreen mana symbolGreen mana symbol for any creature in my deck is a bit better? But still a bit hard to get out. I think this is mostly good in a blink archetype

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Tue, 2016-11-22 23:37
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Wed, 2016-11-23 00:42
Wapulatus
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@KalvinHobbez Yeah, that's what I originally intended it to do. I reworded it to make it more obvious that the OWNER is getting the tokens. I also changed it destroy after looking at Beast Within. Thanks for the feedback!

Wed, 2016-11-23 02:21
marshmellow
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this is a tougher challenge than it looks at first

Oni of the Burning Summit 8 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Creature--Demon Spirit Uncommon
Menace
Whenever Oni of the Burning Summit attacks, sacrifice a land.
Channel--Red mana symbol, sacrifice a land, discard Oni of the Burning Summit: Creatures you control gain menace until end of turn.
10/7

incidentally, by the end of this, i had a full cycle of these 10-mana kamigawa yokais, including Daidarabotchi of the White Hill, Umibozu of the Treacherous Sea, Odokuro of the Blighted Field, and Ogumo of the Tangled Web.

Sun, 2016-11-27 09:06
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old bellow

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Spurn of Reason 8 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Creature - Beast Uncommon
Displace 3 mana symbol (Each permanent you control that you return to its owners hand while casting this spell pays for 3 mana symbol.)
When ~ enters the battlefield discard a card. If you do, draw 2 cards.
5/4

You can not return permanents if its cost won't be reduced further.
If its cost is reduced to 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol it won't be reduced by 2 mana symbol, it will remain as is.
Thus this cards lowest casting cost via displacing is 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol.

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Thu, 2016-11-24 01:20
Sylphiod
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I don't really have much at Uncommon

Jilius's Temptation 8 mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Sorcery Uncommon
You control how target opponent attacks or blocks until your next turn. Untap all creatures you control. Exile ~.

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Wed, 2016-11-23 05:37
Touhoufanatic
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finally thought of an idea. feedback welcome

colossus of rhodes

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Wed, 2016-11-23 06:06
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Corrupted Murk-Dweller 8 mana symbolBlack mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Creature - Zombie Beast Uncommon
Deathtouch (Any amount of damage this deals to a creature is enough to destroy it.)
Trample (This creature can deal excess combat damage to defending player or planeswalker while attacking.)
[7/7]

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Wed, 2016-11-23 14:25
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@jacqui-pup
Actuallt, pixi-rex can get 5 creatures for 8 mana symbolGreen mana symbolGreen mana symbol this way. He can use Wildcalling Summoner's ablity to summon three more Wildcalling Summoners plus another geen creature.

Wed, 2016-11-23 16:27
Pixi-Rex
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@Mahx Michael: HOLY!!! Facepalm I'm so embarrassed. Hmmmm... What a bad design. I'll eather come up with a new one, or it should say "with converted mana cost less that ~'s mana cost."

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Wed, 2016-11-23 17:12
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So, I skipped the last challegne because I couldn't make a card I was happy with. So with that being said I have been playing a lot of Witcher III: Blood & Wine as of late, and there are some specific beasts that rely on sound to find you, if you don't know how to deal with them, they are an absolute pain to deal with, killing you fast, or in the best case scenario, making you waste a lot of bombs, a whole lot of sword durability and potions... So I made a card that resembles that creature in one way or another. As always, all sugestions are welcome.

Etherium Siege Beast 9 mana symbolColorless mana symbol
Artifact Creature - Beast Uncommon
Flash, Trample
Whenever an opponent taps a land for mana, Etherium Siege Beast costs 1 mana symbol less until the end of turn.
When Etherium Siege Beast enters or leaves the battlefield, destroy target land an opponent controls.
6/5

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Wed, 2016-11-23 17:21
Pixi-Rex
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Going with a new entry. You can see it here, and in my entry post.

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Wed, 2016-11-23 18:51
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Changed my entry:

Spoiler:


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Wed, 2016-11-23 20:07
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changed entry, requesting feedback: http://magicseteditor.sourceforge.net/node/12902#comment-287780

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Thu, 2016-11-24 00:10
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@isaac the awesome

Challenge specifies an Uncommon design, as opposed to any other rarity, such as your entry which is that of a Rare.

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Thu, 2016-11-24 01:18
Sylphiod
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got my render

@Zephyr that card still cost 10, because you just spent 5 mana on something else.

Thu, 2016-11-24 11:04
Mahx Michael
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@Daij Djan
You said my card name was bland. I am aware that calling an isntant that summons an army of "Instant Army" isn't very creative. But if you consider what I think of when I hear the word instant army, it's actuallt a very astonishing phenomenon. You know it's like: There is nothing there, but then "Baaam" theres an army!!! Do you get me? Of course if you know an even more fancy name for this phenomenon, I would love ti hear it! Winking smiley


@Pixi-rex, Daji_Djan
Thanks a lot for helping me out with render art, I have finally found something that in some way kind of visualizes what I wanted. Almost...

Thu, 2016-11-24 11:28
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It's not so much the name of Instant Army as the fact that creating lots of tokens isn't terribly interesting, to be honest.

Red mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlack mana symbol
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Thu, 2016-11-24 11:57
Mahx Michael
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sshhh... If you have ever faced off against me, you'll sooner or later learn that a lot of tokens can actually get really scary!
And I also had to hold back since it was supposed to be an uncommon...

Thu, 2016-11-24 15:53
jacqui-pup
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It's not that it isn't scary, it's that it's generally pretty boring since you just changed the numbers on Raise the Alarm

Okay I think I have an entry I actually like now.

Temur Feast-Beast 9 mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Creature - Beast Uncommon
Whenever you sacrifice a creature, you gain life equal to its converted mana cost.
Evoke 5 mana symbolGreen mana symbol
10/10

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Thu, 2016-11-24 18:19
Mahx Michael
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OK. Depends on use, but that opinion is totally up to you. Anyways, I don't think I'm able to come up with something else in time for now, so I'll rather focus on getting it better next week. I'm in the middle of prepearing for exams, so I have to focus my "thinking" on that


Instant Ramen here you go!


Let's all act like if we have no idea that these people once was an undead army that I tried my best to make look like living people...

Thu, 2016-11-24 18:31
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Eldritch Skaab 10 mana symbol
Creature - Eldrazi Zombie Uncommon
Emerge 7 mana symbolBlue mana symbolBlack mana symbol (You may cast this spell by sacrificing a creature and paying the emerge cost reduced by that creature's converted mana cost.)
When you cast Eldritch Skaab, put the top ten cards of your library into your graveyard.
Trample
10/9


"Victory Over Tragedy"
gotta go haste
Red mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlue mana symbol

Fri, 2016-11-25 15:27
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Not going to be able to mock up a card this week as I will be away from computers if I find art could someone make a render please?

Rapacious Channeler 6 mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlack mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol
Creature - Vampire Berserker Uncommon
At the beginning of each opponent's upkeep ~ deals 4 damage to that player and you gain 4 life.
Dash 1 mana symbolBlack mana symbolRed mana symbol
4/3
Lets hope they tire and leave, you don't want to see them when the Bloodmist sets in

Idea behind the card is a decent attacker that can close out the game in quick fashion should you get to 10 mana(the first ability will never happen if you are using the dash cost).

Set the dash and P/T ratio based on the other uncommon dash cards and R/B being a little harder to cast but numbers could all be shunted around based on power concerns and feedback.

Fri, 2016-11-25 18:17
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If you find some art just let me know and I'll take care of it Winking smiley

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Sat, 2016-11-26 16:49
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Against All Odds 8 mana symbolRed mana symbolGreen mana symbol
Instant
Target creature you control gets +6/+6 until end of turn and fights any number of target creatures opponents control.
Against All Odds costs X mana symbol less to cast, where X is the total power of creatures opponents control more than you.

Spoiler:

I had a completely different design, but while looking for art for it I found this art and loved it, so had to make a card around it. It might need to be a sorcery for limited balance, but I like the flavor better at instant.

Sat, 2016-11-26 17:48
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@Amethyst-marie
The last line "~ cost X mana symbol less to cast, whrer X is..." is worded a little wierd. Maybe you could rephrase it?
For example "... where X is how much grater the total power of creatures your opponents control is than your's" or something, idk.

Sat, 2016-11-26 17:56
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"Victory Over Tragedy"
gotta go haste
Red mana symbolBlack mana symbolBlue mana symbol

Sat, 2016-11-26 18:21
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Scatterform Giant 7 mana symbolWhite mana symbolWhite mana symbolBlue mana symbol
Creature - Giant Wizard Uncommon
As long as you control eight or more birds Scatterform Giant has flying.
Kinship — At the beginning of your upkeep, you may look at the top card of your library. If it shares a creature type with Scatterform Giant, you may reveal it. If you do, create to two 1/1 white Bird creature tokens with flying.
8/8

Sun, 2016-11-27 14:52
HaloSSB

Well, here goes nothing. I just hope it isn't bad for a first time...

*Snip*
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List of edits:

Spoiler:
Merged second and third effects.
Fixed typo in Enemy of Life's Specter type. (was "Spectre")
Changed image accordingly.

Changed name to Kamrorak, Devourer of Souls because I felt a thing like that deserved a proper name.
Changed typing to Eldrazi Spirit to differentiate from the Specter's discard-themed archetype.

So for some of the not-so-senseless blabbering I wrote during my intervals of creativity:

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"Yes, my children. Feed me your souls. Because I, your Lord, rescued you from the burden of eternity; from the damning afterlife. Through your sacrifice, I will bring upon this dimension your greatest desire: a soulless world, free from the scourge of existance, away from the nightmares of conscience and matter."

Enemy of Life was a really interesting card to make. Because the contest demands the card to be Uncommon, I had to tame its power while still keeping it in line with the theme of a life-absorbing extradimensional threat. The initial concept involved an effect where Enemy of Life would give -2/-2s to creatures used to activate his Convoke, but it was really weird to word. It also allowed him to be powerful really late in the game with no real issues to your board.

I like to believe he’s in a sweetspot where he’s mediocre when summoned purely without sacrifices, but his mana costs + harsh sacrifices in the late game make him not worth enough compared to other things you could spend the mana / creatures on. Thus, he’s a creature that can be summoned somewhere between 4 and 6 mana, depending on how much you can swarm the field. I also opted to not give him any resistance to spells or battle damage because he’s already prone to outclassing most creatures he battles with, and it would make him too difficult to neutralize.

I wonder if I made any mistakes in this card. Eldrazi Spectre was a thing I wanted to do, but since it’s two "species" meshed together I don’t even know if it’s legal. Learning english in a need-to-know basis didn’t help me either, and I’d bet I worded something wrong in the effects.

(also sorry for the wall of text because I'm so new to this thing I don't know how to hide this in a spoiler box)

Sun, 2016-11-27 00:16
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- [*spoiler] things you want to hide [*/spoiler] without the asterisks.
- It's Specter.
- When you destroy dudes on your own side it's usually "sacrifice" in MTG syntax, so I think better wording should be "When ~ enters the battlefield, sacrifice all creatures you tapped as you cast it."
- Creatures don't usually remember things like "how many creatures were tapped to cast this" as static effects, so this kind of thing's marked with +1/+1 counters. The second and third abilities would look better merged, like

"As ~ enters the battlefield, sacrifice all creatures you tapped as you cast it. Enemy of Life enters the battlefield with two +1/+1 counters on it for each creature sacrificed this way."

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Sun, 2016-11-27 01:38
HaloSSB

Thanks! I made the proper edits, and now it looks more aligned with other cards with long, multi-part events, not to mention cleaner.

The whole post also looks less obstrusive with the spoiler boxes.

Mon, 2016-11-28 05:38
bazzboda

@HaloSSB, I personally would suggest changing the name a little, namely changing "enemy" to something a bit more interesting, I would recommend, "bane of the living[never mind this is card]", "spurn of life", "visage of death", "death's essence", or "consumation of life" (or death).

Another tiny thing, in magic specters are a very particular thing, namely something ridding another thing, and in all but two exceptions cause people to discard stuff. If we go off a card that visually is very similar such as Aurora of Emrakul, I would suggest changing that to "reflection".

old version
Also if anyone has thoughts on my card it would be very much appreciated.

You can not return permanents if its cost won't be reduced further.
If its cost is reduced to 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol it won't be reduced by 2 mana symbol, it will remain as is.
Thus this cards lowest casting cost via displacing is 2 mana symbolRed mana symbolRed mana symbol.

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Sun, 2016-11-27 09:11
Pixi-Rex
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@sdfkjgh: Glad you liked it. Really also love the felvor. I was like I got an epiphany. I when you have that feel you know its a good design. Thanks. A happy smile